4 Responses to Causal rewrite-pinkheart84

1. davidbdale says:

   March 23, 2023 at 3:05 am

   PinkHeart, I’ve read your Definition argument, and I have to tell you it’s actually a 1000-word Causal Argument.

   I imagine the reason you’re stumped about this new assignment is that you’ve already written a first draft of it and are wondering what you can do to emphasize the CAUSES of sleep disruption in teens that you haven’t done there.

   The main idea of your first paragraph is that cell phone use at night CAUSES sleep disruption. The main idea of your second paragraph is that the “mixed messages” social media send to the brain disrupt sleep. In the third, you say internet usage deprives teens of the needed amount of sleep. In the fourth, it’s the all-night notifications that keep a teen from being fully asleep. In the fifth, you offer different language to support the same causal theory, that late night scrolling CAUSES sleep to be less effective. In your Conclusion, you sum up the many ways social media cause teens to undersleep.

   Next question: what would make a good Definition Argument?

   If we can answer that one, I’d suggest you copy and paste the contents of your Definition draft into this post. I’ll start another Reply to help with your Definition argument.

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2. davidbdale says:

   March 23, 2023 at 3:18 am

   You spend 1000 words in your Definition argument describing the many ways social media use, particularly late at night, interfere with the sleep of teens addicted to their cell phones. In other words, you use your Definition argument to make a Causal argument that the obsession with social media CAUSES teens to lose productive sleep. But your sources are all vague about what sort of disruption the late-night scrolling causes, and you are, too. A good plan for a Definition/Categorical argument would be to identify the several ways in which the phone reduces sleep duration and quality. For example, do teens SLEEP FEWER HOURS because they stay up so late at night on their phones that morning comes before they’ve fallen asleep? Do they have trouble getting to sleep or SLEEP FITFULLY because their brains are busy processing the mixed signals of social media? Do they SLEEP LESS SOUNDLY because their active brains are never calm enough for REM sleep? Does the alertness to possible notifications change the VALUE OF SLEEP for teens who are more interested in staying in touch overnight than in being fully unconscious? Your causal evidence will be more convincing, too, if you can connect the many ways social media use CAUSES sleep loss with the TYPES of sleep deprivation that results from late-night scrolling. Does that help? Please let me know.

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3. davidbdale says:

   March 27, 2023 at 11:58 am

   “Late-Night Media Use Disrupts Sleep”
   The title alone indicates your Hypothesis is Causal, PinkHeart. As for helping you with advice about your Causal Argument, I began to do that on March 23 when I said: “PinkHeart, I’ve read your Definition argument, and I have to tell you it’s actually a 1000-word Causal Argument. I imagine the reason you’re stumped about this new assignment is that you’ve already written a first draft of your Causal Argument and are wondering what you can do to emphasize the CAUSES of sleep disruption in teens that you haven’t done there.” My suggestion is that you RENAME your Definition Argument as your Causal Argument and write a brand-new Definition Argument. A good plan for a Definition/Categorical argument would be to identify the several ways in which the phone reduces sleep duration and quality. For example, do teens SLEEP FEWER HOURS because they stay up so late at night on their phones that morning comes before they’ve fallen asleep? Do they have trouble getting to sleep or SLEEP FITFULLY because their brains are busy processing the mixed signals of social media? Do they SLEEP LESS SOUNDLY because their active brains are never calm enough for REM sleep? Does the alertness to possible notifications change the VALUE OF SLEEP for teens who are more interested in staying in touch overnight than in being fully unconscious? Your causal evidence will be more convincing, too, if you can connect the many ways social media use CAUSES sleep loss with the TYPES of sleep deprivation that results from late-night scrolling. Does that help? Please let me know.

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4. pinkheart84 says:

   March 28, 2023 at 9:05 am

   Okay Thank you professor, this is very helpful, and I will do that.

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