Causal Rewrite – chickennugget246

Seat Belts Cost Lives

Seat belts are killing us. The use of a seat belt, while in an accident, has caused people to fracture bones, injure their necks, and even caused death. The most common injuries caused by seat belts are abrasions, bruises, and cuts. The more severe injuries are fractures, internal organ damage, and various soft tissue injuries. In addition, seat belts also can cause damage to the rib cage and chest areas, and they can even burn the occupants’ skin if the seat belts are made of flammable material. The more serious injuries are due to the drivers and passengers being impinged and/or crushed inside the vehicle, unable to escape the impact due to the seat belt literally locking them in place. Consider, for example, a driver wearing a seat belt when a severe impact occurs on the driver’s side door. Instantaneously, the driver could be killed as the interior driving area gets completely demolished, leaving no means of escape for the driver. Without a seat belt, that same driver could have maneuvered to the passenger seat and survived the accident.  

Even though seat belts are harming people, they continue to be installed in every motor vehicle as it is mandated that they be worn. If we were not forced to wear seat belts, these injuries and deaths could be prevented. When we consider that drivers have an enormous responsibility while operating a vehicle, the remedy is clear and it does not involve the use of seat belts. Drivers simply need to obey the laws, drive carefully, react cautiously, drive with alertness, and be very aware of their surroundings. According to “Car Accident Statistics: Fatalities, Injuries and Top Risk Factors,” “Nearly 1 in 10 fatal accidents are caused by distracted drivers.” According to the statistics by Studinski Law, it is estimated that about 33% of all deaths involved in car accidents are caused by reckless driving. Also, driver-related auto accidents include distracted drivers.

There are about 1,000 people injured and nine people killed every day because of distracted driving. Distracted driving takes the attention of the driver away from the task of driving. Such distractions include eating, drinking, and texting. Distracted driving alone causes 20% of car accident injuries, while 30% of all auto accidents are credited to the speed of reckless drivers. Information from “Car Accident Statistics: Fatalities, Injuries and Top Risk Factors,” states “These accidents are a direct result of negligence.” Examples of poor driving include speeding, failure to yield the right of way, running through stop lights, tailgating, erratic driving and racing, and texting or talking on the cell phone. Not only are these examples of reckless driving and the cause of accidents, they are illegal. In short, drivers need to respect the road. 

Consider that there is a seat belt found in every car, but not in any motorcycle. How do motorcyclists stay safe? They ride with great caution and alertness. According to “While riding a motorcycle, reflective clothing should be worn,” motorcyclists stay safe by using hand signals, wearing reflective or bright clothing, and driving in the daylight with activated headlights. Motorcyclists do not have any protection surrounding them while driving and therefore, must possess a lot more highway alertness to remain safe. While driving they must have clutch control, use two separate brakes, and keep the cycle steady and upright. Motorcycle riders must frequently check their blind spot before merging into a lane. This fear of the rider ensures an enhanced dedication to safety such as the check of their blindspot most, if not, all of the time.

All of these factors are performed to prevent a rider from having an accident with another vehicle. According to “7 Reasons Motorcycle Riders Make Better Car Drivers,” motorcycle riders are in tune to their ride, making them a better driver overall. The motorcyclist’s philosophy is to ride “like everyone is trying to kill you.” This motto allows the rider to anticipate and look for the most dangerous situations. As a rider, from the same source, states, “You learn never to trust another driver with your own safety and this makes you a better, more defensive driver.” This same philosophy needs to be accepted and implemented in the world of motor vehicle drivers. Comparing motorcycles to cars, cars have seat belts, airbags, and steel cages surrounding their occupants. While all of this equipment is installed with the intention of protecting the occupants from any impact, it gives the driver a heightened sense of security than that of the motorcycle riders, unfortunately resulting in a much lower level of attention on the roadway. 

The Peltzman Effect, as stated in the article “The Peltzman Effect,” is a theory which states, “when safety measures are implemented, people’s perception of risk decreases, and so people may feel that they can now afford to make riskier decisions. As a result, the phenomenon predicts that mandatory safety measures actually experience a lower benefit than we would expect, because the safety benefits brought about by these measures are offset to some extent by increases in risky behavior.” The article pointed out that drivers were more prone to drive recklessly due to the lower perceived risk when safety equipment was installed. Any benefit from placing safety equipment on vehicles was offset by the increase in the number of accidents due to the greater occurrence of reckless driving. Consequently, the mandatory safety measures failed to decrease the level of fatalities.

When we consider young drivers, it is even more evident that the method to make driving safer is by having safer drivers and not by the use of seat belts. According to “Car Accident Statistics: Fatalities, Injuries and Top Risk Factors,” “if we could change the manners and mentality of drivers, mostly young ones, there would be a significant reduction in reckless driving accidents.” Moreover, from the same source, it reports drivers between the ages of 16 and 19 are three times more likely to be involved in a crash than drivers over 20. In fact, teenage drivers cause significantly more accidents than senior drivers. In another study from yet the same source, “the US Census Bureau estimates that 12.2% of auto wrecks in the United States are caused by teenage drivers while elderly drivers over the age of 65 are responsible for 7.5% of crashes.” The reason is because young drivers are more likely to be distracted and to be less cautious on the roadways than older drivers.

Consequently, there needs to be more driving practice and stricter regulations on the roadways so there are less accidents and less injuries. With more education and better training for young drivers, the amount of accidents will greatly decline. Likewise, lessons need to be taught early on and better driving practices need to be implemented, similar to the ones held by motorcyclists. 

In conclusion, better driving practices, earlier intervention, and more highway alertness could help to prevent most accidents, and therefore, reduce the number of injuries and deaths caused by the false reliance on seat belts.

References

Bishop, L. “Car Accident Statistics: Fatalities, Injuries and Top Risk Factors.” March 28, 2023.

Chandler, R. (2018, April 3). “7 Reasons Motorcycle Riders Make Better Car Drivers.”

The Peltzman Effect.” Retrieved April 17, 2023.

While riding a motorcycle, reflective clothing should be worn.” Retrieved April 17, 2023.

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8 Responses to Causal Rewrite – chickennugget246

  1. davidbdale says:

    Your lack of research is holding you back, ChickenNugget. I like the concentration on Reckless Driving, the Motorcycle Comparison, and the discussion of ways in which seat belts can injure, kill, or trap drivers in their cars.

    But there’s a TON of academic study of highway accidents, recklessness, causes of death, etc., that you seem to be ignoring. Your sources are chosen to add a quote here an there as an ornament.

    The quickest way for you to earn a grade improvement with your next revisions is to dig deeper into sources.

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  2. davidbdale says:

    I’m adding this Reply here so we don’t lose it. You had two posts called “Causal Rewrite,” one of which included the following Reply. I’ve deleted the post and its Reply.

    Seat Belts Cost Lives
    Your Hypothesis gives you the perfect opportunity for a killer Causal Argument, ChickenNugget, pun intended. You hint at its essence at the end of your Definition Argument when you introduce the very clever example of the motorcycle rider. You’ve spent your Definition argument mostly cataloging the multiple ways seat belts can inflict harm. That’s essential to what comes next. You need to demonstrate now that better driving practices, more highway alertness, more sensible lane changes, etc., can prevent most accidents and hence, reduce the number of times a seat belt can inflict harm. On the contrary side of the argument, you also demonstrate that “overprotected” drivers made “invulnerable” by their belts and airbags engage in the reckless driving practices that inevitably lead to accidents, injury, and death. You’ll need good evidence for that claim, CN. Readers won’t just nod and agree that we’d all be better off without seat belts. Seek evidence of recklessness that leads to accidents. What category of driver is more likely to cause an accident, the new teen driver in her air-bag cocoon or the seasoned driver who’s seen an accident or two? Seek also evidence of impaired or vulnerable drivers behaving more responsibly.

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  3. chickennugget246 says:

    I made revisions! Could you let me know if this is more of what you are looking for?

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    • davidbdale says:

      Wow!
      What a rewrite!
      Terrific new data and sources.

      (Break your long paragraphs—2, 3, and 5—into their appropriate sizes.)
      (Watch out for—and ELIMINATE—any 2nd-person language.)

      Regraded.

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  4. chickennugget246 says:

    Thank you! I broke up my long paragraphs and I eliminated the 2nd person language.

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  5. chickennugget246 says:

    Sorry, I didn’t realize! Is it too late for a regrade?

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