Core Value 1. My work demonstrates that I used a variety of social and interactive practices that involve recursive stages of exploration, discovery, conceptualization, and development.
My Rebuttal rewrite demonstrates that I used a variety of social and interactive practices that involve recursive stages of exploration, discovery, conceptualization, and development. While researching I was able to find lots of evidence however I noticed some of my articles did not support my thesis that “The unbearable loneliness caused by covid 19 drove many to adopt dogs they are incapable of attending to after their lives pick back up again.” as much as others and had to do more research. I learned that when researching you do not want to find articles that argue your exact point, instead find multiple articles that will give you unique information for your thesis. After rereading my Rebuttal I was able to pick up on common flaws and was able to correct them on my own after learning about what to do and what not to do in a writing piece. In addition to self correcting I asked for advice on how to improve my essay. With the help of my professor I was able to eliminate vague information and replace it with strongly worded claims backed up by evidence from properly cited articles. After getting feedback from my professor and making the proper changes I followed up with more questions to make sure I could edit my assignment to the best of my abilities. I’ve gotten more comfortable throughout the year having conversations about my work with my professor and was able to raise some of my grades from my revisions.
Core Value 2. My work demonstrates that I read critically, and that I placed texts into conversation with one another to create meaning by synthesizing ideas from various discourse communities.
My Rebuttal rewrite as well as my White Paper demonstrates that I can read critically, as well as place text into conversation with one another to create meaning by synthesizing ideas from various discourse communities. I was able to make specific choices in my writing to meet my goals by using imagery in my Rebuttal rewrite as evidence to defend my argument. My White Paper shows how I was able to understand the author’s writing by my ability to summarize key information provided in the articles I gathered. I was then able to question the information I found in order to decide what fits into my argument and what information I unnecessary. I was also able to expand on information I found in my own words and ideas to provide a new perspective making my argument strong and unique. For example in my Rebuttal Rewrite I understood the information from “The COVID-19 pet adoption boom: Did it really happen?” by Matthew Salois such as “Shelters saw 32% fewer dog intakes and 23% fewer cat intakes.” and paraphrased it as “Salois shares that there were 32% fewer dogs adopted.”
Core Value 3. My work demonstrates that I rhetorically analyzed the purpose, audience, and contexts of my own writing and other texts and visual arguments.
In my Purposeful Summaries I was able to demonstrate that I rhetorically analyze the purpose, audience, and contexts of my own writing as well as others. I was able to realize who the audience was in the articles I read for my Purposeful Summaries and figure out what the author was trying to prove. I am able to identify and analyze the articles I read as well as create my own argument by using the information at hand. I was able to write to the same audience as the author of the article I read but adjust my purpose to fit my thesis. I was able to respond to varying audiences at the end of the assignment. We created three paragraphs dedicated to three different audiences . This demonstrates my flexibility and adaptability in creating arguments as a writer. In one of my purposeful summaries of the article “How to Keep Your Home Security From Spying on You” by Kirk Miller I was able to paraphrase “these partnerships let police request recorded video within a specific time and area” to “Police will now have access to your Ring doorbell whenever they please, taking away another aspect of privacy” which backs up my argument much better.
Core Value 4: My work demonstrates that I have met the expectations of academic writing by locating, evaluating, and incorporating illustrations and evidence to support my own ideas and interpretations.
In my Definition Rewrite I demonstrated how I was able to meet the expectations of academic writing by locating, evaluating, and incorporating illustrations and evidence to support my own ideas and interpretations. In my definition argument all my information was gathered from multiple sources to make my argument. I had to take the information I read and create it into my own without plagiarizing or changing the information not fit my thesis. I practiced inquiry-driven research in my essay by starting off my research with questions like “how many dogs were adopted during COVID-19.” These questions I researched helped me understand the complexities and nuances of my hypothesis from multiple positions. I backed up all my information with properly cited statistics and facts that I gathered from the appropriate resources.
Core Value 5. My work demonstrates that I respect my ethical responsibility to represent complex ideas fairly and to the sources of my information with appropriate citation.
My Annotated Bibliography strongly demonstrates how I acknowledge my ethical responsibility to respect and credit other writers’ ideas fairly and to the sources of my information with appropriate citation. When writing Annotated Bibliography I made sure to represent the article exactly how the author conveys their message and to not twist their point of view with my own ideas as well as not plagiarizing. I made sure that when I summarized the article BLAH BLAH I got Bella Vista Health Centers message across accurately that “Studies have proven that being around others can lower the severity of depression. It keeps stress levels at a low and helps keep anxiety down.” I then explained that I will be using that information to to explain why people were looking for a companion. It gave me a good idea of how important socialization is for your mental health. In my Research Paper I was also able to remain fair and acknowledge what was not my work as well as give credit to the source with a reference page underneath. I met the code of academic integrity by keeping my thoughts and feelings separate from others by using/including paraphrases, quotations, citations, and a Reference page.
I was wondering if I could get a regrade in this?
I like your improvements, MT, but this paraphrase you specifically mention actually misinterprets your source, it appears.
INTAKES as reported by a shelter are animals that are SURRENDERED to the shelter, not adopted.
Regraded anyway to reflect your good changes.
Regraded SAT APR 29