Rebuttal Rewrite-wildcuttlefish

Little Lies Cause Huge Consequences

Every day, patients come and go through the doors of hospitals where they can find hope for treatment, healing, and gentle care from the physicians. What is impressive about hospitals in America today is the advance technologies, enabling doctors to do intensive research, use high-tech equipment, and provide effective diagnosis for patients.

Ideally, patients would enter the hospital or doctor’s office and describe exactly how they feel and answer the doctor’s questions truthfully so it can be easier for the doctors to figure out the problem and make the right decisions. However, the process typically is more complicated than that. Why? Because patients lie.

According to a survey, 77% of healthcare professions say that “one-fourth or more of their patients omit facts or lie to them about their personal health.” Consequently, this misleads the doctors, making it difficult for him or her to find out the true problem, go through unnecessary procedures, and even prescribe the wrong medication to patients.

In William Morgan’s article, “Why Do Patients Lie to Their Doctors,” one of the reasons why patients tend to lie is because they care about how they will be perceived by the doctors. For instance, when a doctors ill ask about the consumption of alcohol, some patients will lie in the amount so they wouldn’t feel judged. Clearly, people are unaware of the power they wield in helping the doctors diagnose them and it is their fault if the doctors could not perform to his or her best ability.

However, should doctors hold responsibility for this problem also? Incidents  where white lies of the patients cause confusion and major complications in the procedures have been so common and happens to so many healthcare professionals that they could have at least figure out a way to avoid making those mistakes over and over again. There is a clear problem where patients are not comfortable enough to tell the truth, why not address that problem? Patients shouldn’t take up all of the blame if they are uncomfortable and unaware of how important their input is. Therefore, it should be the doctor’s responsibility to make patients feel open enough and pull information out of patients to get the most accurate information. In addition, doctors should let it be known to the patients the consequences of not telling the honest truth so that patients can be more careful.

Steps doctors can take to improve the patient’s care is taking the time to develop a friendly,  laid back relationship with the patients and establish trust.

Though doctors often do not get honest replies from patients, resulting in unnecessary procedures and mistakes, it is time for doctors to step up and improve their performance by working harder to form an honest partnership with patients.


Works Cited

Jones, Val, Dr. “Better Health: Smart Health Commentary Featured.” Better Health RSS2. Better Health, 30 Mar. 2015. Web. 19 Nov. 2015.

“More than One in Four Patients Lie to the Doctor.” More than One in Four Patients Lie to the Doctor. The Advisory Board Company, 19 Feb. 2013. Web. 19 Nov. 2015.

Morgan, William. “Why Do Patients Lie to Their Doctors?” ACA –. ACA News., May 2012. Web. 19 Nov. 2015

Schwartz, Shelly K. “When Patients Lie to You.” Roswell Park Cancer Institute. UBM Medica, 2010. Web. 19 Nov. 2015.



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2 Responses to Rebuttal Rewrite-wildcuttlefish

  1. wildcuttlefish says:

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  2. davidbdale says:

    P1. Great first sentence, wildcuttlefish. Not a bad second sentence either. Sadly, the second sentence doesn’t advance the idea expressed in the first. In fact, it seems to be from another topic altogether. Shouldn’t the second sentence deliver on the promise made in the first, that patients are looking for good physician care? If so, the second sentence shouldn’t ignore the care doctors provide.

    I’m going to look through the rest of this essay for a better second sentence and see if I can rescue this first paragraph for you.

    I think I’ve found a bigger problem that probably results from your uncertainty about your thesis. It’s unclear from this essay what your larger paper will attempt to prove, wildcuttlefish.

    Here’s the way this is supposed to work:
    1) You declare a thesis you believe you can persuasively argue.
    2) In your research, you discover powerful counterarguments that threaten your thesis, but don’t defeat it.
    3) You know you must acknowledge those arguments because they will be in your readers’ minds. If you ignore them, you can’t possibly be persuasive.
    4) You write a Rebuttal Argument to identify those powerful arguments, stating clearly and respectfully that you understand them.
    5) Then you crush those arguments with your devastating refutations.

    Here, you make a compelling argument that because patients are not truthful with their doctors they frustrate accurate diagnosis. Your overall thesis, which I have glimpsed in other posts, is that let’s just say rich patients receive better care than let’s just say poor patients. You explain this by suggesting that because rich patients communicate better with their doctors, they receive better care. In other words, doctors don’t set out to provide better care to rich patients; the rich patients themselves are responsible for the difference in care because of their superior communication skills.

    OK. That overall thesis is sound, controversial, and arguable. It might even be statistically demonstrable.

    The crucial logical step missing from this argument if it’s going to contribute anything valuable to your thesis is that poor patients are more likely to lie to their doctors than rich patients. Are you comfortable making that claim?

    You can certainly argue that doctor/patient communication is a two-way responsibility. Can can hold doctors responsible to gauge the veracity of their patients’ histories and complaints. And absolutely they will achieve better care results if they do so . . .

    . . . but . . .

    . . . will the extra care they take to improve communications change the discrepancy you have claimed between the care received by rich and poor patients? Certainly it will change the ratio if one group is more honest than the other.

    See the problem?
    Don’t be frustrated, wildcuttlefish. This is hard work, but it’s not beyond your capabilities. The artificial nature of these assignments (making the overall argument in three small sections) will disappear when you put your whole paper together. Even if this material doesn’t make the best rebuttal essay, it’s still very important to your thesis.

    Look forward, not backwards.
    Was this at all helpful?
    Reply, please.


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