Not Because-lokiofasgard

1. Coats wasn’t fired because he was using a legal drug, marijuana, for a legitimate purpose for which he had a prescription. He was fired for violating workplace policy.

Revised 1: Coats was fired for violating workplace police, regardless of his prescribed drug use.

2. An employer isn’t able to fire a person who has anxiety because they are taking the correct medication to deal with the issue.

Revised 2: A person who is taking the correct medication to deal with anxiety cannot be fired by its employer.

3. Employees don’t get fired for going out and having a few beers after work because alcohol is legal, but in Colorado so is marijuana.

Revised 3: Marijuana, similar to going out for a few beers, is legal in Colorado, therefore employees don’t get fired for it.

4. Coats shouldn’t have been fired because he was trying to treat the pain he endured on a daily basis.

Revised 4: Coats was just trying to treat the pain he endured on a daily basis, he should not have been fired.

5. It’s not fair to discriminate against him because he was able to ease the pain of his multiple spasms by using marijuana.

Revised 5: He was able to eased his pain and its not fair to discriminate him because of that.

6. Coats wasn’t harming anyone at his job because he was smoking marijuana but he was doing so on his own time and not at work.

Revised 6: Coats did this on his own time, not during work, to avoid harming anyone else

7. Omar Gonzalez didn’t penetrate deep into the White House because of the swift actions of Secret Service agents.

Revised 7: The Secret Service’ swift actions was not the reason for Omar Gonzalez penetration of the White House.

8. The Secret Service isn’t being compelled to explain its actions because of the way it  responded to the breach of the White House, but how the breach occurred is under question.

Revised 8: The Secret Service is questioning how the breach occurred in the White House, they dont feel obligated to explain the way they responded to the breach.

9. Secret Service chief Julia Pierson won’t be fired because of her testimony before Congress yesterday. Her incompetence might cost her her job though.

Revised 9: The incompetence of Secret Service agent, Julia Pierson, may cost her, her job. Her testimony before Congress will not get her fired.

10. Secret Service agents didn’t use deadly force against the intruder because he was carrying a knife with a 4-inch blade.

Revised 10: The man was carrying a 4-inch blade, so they did not use deadly force.

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1 Response to Not Because-lokiofasgard

  1. davidbdale says:

    It appears you understand the logic, Loki, so I’ll react only to your own new sentences.

    Revised 1: Coats was fired for violating workplace police, regardless of his prescribed drug use.
    —Great. Doesn’t need a comma.

    Revised 2: A person who is taking the correct medication to deal with anxiety cannot be fired by its employer.
    —”its”? I know it’s hard to know how to stay woke on this topic, but either go with “his” employer, or “her” employer, or “his/her” employer, or the newly-popular “their” employer.

    Revised 3: Marijuana, similar to going out for a few beers, is legal in Colorado, therefore employees don’t get fired for it.
    —Not parallel, but these are:
    1. Smoking marijuana, similar to drinking a few beers, is legal.
    2. Marijuana, similar to beer, is legal.

    Revised 4: Coats was just trying to treat the pain he endured on a daily basis, he should not have been fired.
    —Needs a semicolon.

    Revised 5: He was able to eased his pain and its not fair to discriminate him because of that.
    —Three sloppy grammar/punctuation/usage errors.

    Revised 6: Coats did this on his own time, not during work, to avoid harming anyone else
    —Nice!

    Revised 7: The Secret Service’ swift actions was not the reason for Omar Gonzalez penetration of the White House.
    —WERE not the reason

    Revised 8: The Secret Service is questioning how the breach occurred in the White House, they don’t feel obligated to explain the way they responded to the breach.
    —Good grammar.

    9.Revised 9: The incompetence of Secret Service agent, Julia Pierson, may cost her, her job. Her testimony before Congress will not get her fired.
    —I don’t think she’s an agent, but OK. “may cost her her job” without the comma.

    Revised 10: The man was carrying a 4-inch blade, so they did not use deadly force.
    —Is 4 inches too short a blade? Or too long?

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