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Avocados are delicious food sources that have countless of benefiting factors to eating them. A staple food that you will find in popularized vegetarian diets. The vegetarian diet has also been increasingly popular among the dietary spectrum. Not only is being a vegetarian noted for its health benefits. It plays a significant ethical role when its members choose to convert. In health, Ethics and the Environment: A qualitative study of vegetarian motives, twenty-eighth of participants participated in a study to answer the simple question of why they chose vegetarianism. Animal welfare is the most prominent decision. But there is the underlying fact that there is a complementary concern to the environment. And this stems from the impacts of the meat industry. One participant noted that they “found there are health and environmental benefits to vegetarianism, as well as lessened injury to animals. It’s all good.” But is it all good? There is a misconception within the agriculture industry that people overlook, and the unfortunate effects of mass production on the environment contribute to health complications.
There is a global production of avocados, and it’s noted in Living Wage Report for Michoacán, Mexico-Non-metropolitan urban and rural northwestern regions that this production has increased by 172% during the last decade. Now, most of the world’s avocados come from Michoacán, Mexico. And agriculture in this region is their most influential economic income. Mexicos mass production of avocados contributes to 50% of the international contribution of the avocado product. But the secret is because avocados are produced in abundance, it creates a detrimental impact on the surrounding environment. When a single product like avocados is grown in a similar location, it disrupts the natural process of agriculture. Meaning when you grow only one plant, in one area all the time the soil starts to degrade. This immense amount of growth will yield fewer avocados per year. If avocados can’t keep up with demand, there will be devastating consequences for Mexico’s economy. And vegetarians worldwide will be disappointed if one of their popular foods isn’t always available.
To combat the sequences of nature and make sure yields are consistent most companies resort to fertilizers. In the Investigation of Effect of Chemical Fertilizers on Environment, it empathizes that most fertilizers contain several ingredients. These ingredients are phosphate, nitrate, ammonium, and potassium salt. They’re are the steroids of plants and are supposed to increase plant production. But fertilization over accumulates heavy metals within the soil. This can result in finding a fertilizer in places it is not intended. There is a high level of nitrogen in fertilizers. And only about 50% of the that will be absorbed by plants. The remainder amount of the nitrogen will seep into the soil and find its way into groundwater. With that being said, there is research that finds high levels of nitrogen in wells of agriculture areas that use fertilizers as a means of production.
But water isn’t the only factor that is affected by the mass production of avocados, fertilizers are potent in soil and air pollution. Soil isn’t as easy to track as water because it doesn’t fall into a stream or sewage and, there isn’t a directive factor of pollution within the soil and the air like water. So soil pollution isn’t as immediately obvious, but it’s seen through time when the soil starts to degrade. Ingredients like sodium and potassium can negatively impact the soil throwing off its PH balance.
And although air pollution isn’t as prominent as the water or soil, there are nitro oxide emissions caused by fertilization. This gas is sitting in the low layer of the tropospheric ozone and contributes to gases not being able to leave earth, commonly known as the greenhouse effect.
And these pollutions are taking a toll on the people of Michoacán, Mexico. Pollution is undoubtedly bad for the environment, but it can cause serious health implications for the people living in the area. Environmental pollutions: Its effects on life and its remedies evaluate how pollutions can cause serious health problems. It is lead to believe that in the case of water pollution, it is said that water pollution is the leading cause of death and affects such a wide range of areas like our oceans, lakes, and drinking water. Drinking polluted water can give one water-borne disease like; Hookworm, liver and kidney damage, and in severe cases cancer and heart disease. High concentrations of nitrogen in water pollution also have secondary effects on infants that cause methemoglobinemia. It is a blood disorder where an unusual amount of Hemoglobin protein is produced, disrupting the distribution of oxygen throughout the body, creating what the world likes to call blue baby syndrome. Infants don’t have stomach acid so they cant in a sense fight off the nitrate, and as a result, iron and oxygen transfer in the blood are lost, leaving infants strangled to death. Yes, the mass production of avocados is killing infants because of how recklessly the world desires this food.
And there is a power struggle in Michoacán, Mexico between the economy and the health of the citizens. In, Living Wage Report Michoacán, Mexico Non-metropolitan urban and rural northwestern regions it is accounted that 46% of citizens live in poverty. There is a lack of health care and social security access. And 28% of citizens do not have health care access at all. If people can’t afford health care, then pollution in this area caused by avocados is significant to their lives. They cannot cure the disease or get help for their newborn children, and they’re left stuck. Vegetarianism and popular global foods are damaging communities and lives. A diet that focuses on the well-being of animals because they’re being slaughtered doesn’t account for the people suffering in Mexico because avocados are a staple food. And it makes one wonder, is being a vegetarian worth the cost of human lives.
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To show that you can, I linked the title of your “Soil pollution” article to its url and got rid of the three lines of https.
It’s odd that your authors (Mishra, Roychoudhury, and Mohammad) are represented only by their initials, and weirdly. Even if you wanted to use just initials, they should be punctuated as:
R. K. M., N. R., and N. M.
But names make more sense. Sorry. I don’t usually pay much attention to bibliographic style, but this one really stands out.
I won’t be too hard on you, Tacos, because you produced 1000 words on time, you tell a good story, and you back up your narrative with research, but this reads a lot more like a Causal argument than a Definition or Categorical argument. You seem to be detailing the many ways raising avocados damages the environment, which is to say X CAUSES Y and Z and A and B.
A shift of focus might be enough to swing the deal. For example, you set the stage by saying vegetarians are proud that their choice of diet benefits their own health, the health of the environment, and the well-being of animals. That’s a Causal Claim. Proving it or disproving it would require a causal argument.
But the same material can be approached categorically. The strategy is to suggest that a truly beneficial dietary choice would have to meet certain criteria.
1. It would benefit the consumer’s health
2. It would benefit human health overall
3. It would benefit the health of the environment
4. It would at the very least not harm animals more than raising them for food
5. It would at the very least not harm the environment more than the alternatives
6. It would at the very least not kill children
If you then devoted a paragraph to demonstrating with just one product that raising massive numbers of avocados violates 4 out of 5 of the criteria, then choosing avocados for the SOLE and SELFISH benefit of keeping the consumer healthy would be hard to justify. And it would make a Definition/Categorical argument.
If you’re wondering what that leaves you for a Causal Argument, don’t worry. There’s plenty of causation to track. For example, how much MORE HARM is done to the environment for all the fertilizers and pesticides needed to increase yields to meet huge increases in demand. Suppose everybody became a vegetarian and the world needed twice or three times as many avocados. Track how much devastation THAT would cause. Etc.
Was any of that helpful? As always, I expect you to respond to show your respect for the feedback process. Thanks!
Now, about your language. I think you’re working too hard to sound like an academic paper, Tacos. Maybe try something less “papery” and more like natural speech. I apologize if that’s what you WERE going for, but here’s a version of your first paragraph that eliminates the fragments, doesn’t try too hard, and sounds more natural.
That’s still not a perfect paragraph. It does some wandering, and it doesn’t indicate YET that avocado mass production could be harmful to animals, but it’s much easier to read than your first draft, I think, because it’s so much simpler. Simple isn’t easy to accomplish, but it’s worth trying, because it’s more effective.
Helpful? Not too intrusive?