Robust Verbs- Sphagettitacosforthesoul

A rising problem has emerged in Vancouver with heroin addicts committing crimes to support their habits.

The “free heroin for addicts” program is doing everything they can to stop the addicts.

But the large crime rate is due to the addicts and results as problem for the city.

Addicts have a hard time getting through their day to day lives.

And daily activities such as jobs, interactions, and relationships are hard to maintain because they are using.

Because heroin users are addcitive, they will do whatever they have to do to get their hands on the drug.

The crimes committed were breaking and entering as well as stealing.

Heroin users do not have limitations on how far they’ll go to receive this drug to feed their addiction.

The program will only benefit the cities rising crime rates, and the herorin addicts will not get the support they need to ween off of herorin.

To get the addicts off the streets and commit less crimes, drugs will be provided to them.

The program will clear space in hospitals from heroin addicts.

Hospitals should not have to deal with people that want to use bad drugs or unsanitary needles and find themselves being unable to afford hospital bills and hard to cope without the drug.

This program gives people free heroin in the cleanest way possible.

This will in turn fix the city but not the addiction that these people face.

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2 Responses to Robust Verbs- Sphagettitacosforthesoul

  1. spaghettitacosforthesoul says:

    I kept the sentences pretty much separated because that’s the way I corrected it.

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    • davidbdale says:

      Correcting errors is a good first step, Tacos, but it doesn’t make your paragraph more robust if it leaves the wimpy verbs intact. Your verbs are:

      has emerged

      is doing

      is due to

      have

      are

      will do

      were

      do not have

      will benefit / will not get

      will be provided

      will clear

      should not have / find

      gives

      will fix

      Not a lot of power there. Your paragraph is full of addicts robbing and dying and a city that is suffering and innovating and struggling, but your verbs indicate none of that.

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