Causal Argument Rewrite-rowanstudent6

To the Sea

The Jersey Shore is home to the best surf break in the world because of the adversity that surfers face during each session and the elation that results from overcoming these setbacks to have an enjoyable experience. While some waves such as the Banzai Pipeline, Lower Trestles, or the Box may provide more satisfying rides or may provide the rider with better footage, the Jersey Shore provides an enjoyable experience because of the obstacles that are present each and every session. The true triumph of a New Jersey surfer is being able to manage less than stellar conditions, an ever-changing surf break, crowds in the water, and the varying temperatures throughout the year to have a year of pleasant memories while surfing as well as to see improvement in surfing technique. It is emerging victorious over obstacles that makes the Jersey Shore the best surf spot.

Adversity breeds improvement and the Jersey shore is full of adversity. New Jersey is in between three major US cities; Philadelphia, Washington DC, and New York City which draws hoards of tourists to the area. On top of the locations adjacent to these major metropolitan hubs, is the fact that New Jersey is a beautiful summer destination for many in the Northeast. This results in beaches and lineups becoming cramped and overcrowded during the summer. As Memorial Day approaches, beach towns prepare for the arrivals of thousands of tourists from the Northeast United States and beyond. An article from The Economist was written in 2015 which analyzed the effect of tourists on New Jersey. The article stated, ” Last year tourism accounted for $36.4 billion of its [New Jersey] GDP, or about 6.6% of the state’s entire economy…about 508,000 jobs, nearly 10% of New Jersey’s total, are in the tourism industry.”

With so much financial and economic gain being tied to tourism, New Jersey beaches are often cramped during the summer which leads to too many novice surfers in the water. Novice surfers can pose a danger to themselves and others in the water as surfers on a wave weave through bodies paddling out while on their ride. I can recall several instances in which I have bailed from a wave or narrowly missed someone due to the number of people in the lineup. However, this should not discourage surfers from visiting our shores. If anything it should motivate them.

The Jersey Shore provides the unique opportunity for surfers to better their awareness, anticipation, and knowledge of the wave by forcing them to avoid kooks on nearly every wave in order to have an enjoyable ride. Overcoming this challenge adds to the enjoyment of surfing by increasing the risk of surfing and while also allowing for a surfer to better their skills in the water.

However, tourism to New Jersey beaches does not occur year round as many visitors have departed by the time the leaves change color. As hurricane season, and some of the best surf approaches, so does colder water. According to a study by the National Ocean and Atmospheric Association, or NOAA, “In summer throughout New Jersey, water temperatures average 73.4 degrees fahrenheit, yet in winter the average water temperature is 40.2 degrees fahrenheit.” While summer surf normally requires only a pair of boardshorts; winter surf requires a five millimeter wetsuit. 

This added layer of clothing not only adds weight to the surfer which increases difficulty of paddling, but also represents another challenge that New Jersey’s surfers face. In winter, surfers are constantly at odds with nature as they struggle to stay warm and loose during a session. However, despite the bone chilling cold of nearly below freezing water temperatures, surfing in the winter is often rewarding as it allows for a surfer to overcome the mental adversity of the cold while also catching some of the best waves of the year. Surfing requires perseverance to improve as mistakes are common. This ability to endure the cold allows surfers to learn to endure hardships to improve in and out of the water. It also provides surfers with a sense of accomplishment as they have gone toe to toe with not only the ocean, but the cold as well and have emerged from the frigid waters, victorious.

Another challenge of New Jersey surfing is the constantly changing breaks. As a result of the destruction caused by Superstorm Sandy, beaches along the shore replenish the sand by dredging from the sea. This creates a new break each year as sand is pulled from the ocean to the beach which results in a different location and different quality of the surf break. A study conducted in 2018 by the Coastal Education and Research Foundation Inc. found that dredging had significant impacts on surf breaks. The researchers, William R. Dally and Daniel A. Osiecki, stated, “Any rides that are obtained are therefore notably shorter and less enjoyable. Associated with this compression, the number of breaking waves in the surf zone is reduced from as many as three to as few as one.” This change after the nourishment results in surfers learning the new functions of their home break each year.

This allows for surfers to become more skilled at adapting to changing circumstances in the water which is crucial as a surfer. Dally and Osiecki also states that “As dredging occurs longshore along beaches, closeouts become more common which necessitates more improvisation from surfers in the water.” Surfers have to either improve their read of incoming sets or make a split second decision on whether or not they will take off on waves. If they decide to take off on waves, the ability to pump around a closed out section or a closing tube become integral for success. This furthers the need for surfers to become quick on their feet as New Jersey surfers become more accustomed to new breaks and closeouts, only for the break to change the following year. This keeps New Jersey in the mindset of change and adaptation as no aspect of their favorite break remains the same from the previous summer.

Surfing in New Jersey is difficult. Whether it be the crowds in the summer, the cold winter paddle outs, or the annually changing break; New Jersey surfers must be tough mentally and physically in order to overcome the obstacles set before them. As New Jersey relied further on tourism for economic gain, these issues may only worse, but that will only invigorate New Jersey surfers as it is not an easy session that New Jersey surfers want, but one that pushes us to our limit. Whether it be mentally and physically overcoming the cold or staying mentally and physically loose enough to evade reckless novices and closeouts. The New Jersey surfer feels fulfilled by facing a season of obstacles in and out of the water, but emerging from each session better than the last.

References

A Shore thing; Tourism in New JerseyThe Economist. 30 May 2015. 6 March 2023.

Coastal Water Temperature GuideNational Ocean and Atmospheric Administration. 6 March 2023.

Evaluating the Impact of Beach Nourishment on Surfing: Surf City, Long Beach Island, New Jersey, U.S.A.Coastal Education and Research Foundation Inc. July 2018. 6 March 2023

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6 Responses to Causal Argument Rewrite-rowanstudent6

  1. I completed this essay in advance by looking at the instructions already posted in the Causal Argument post. I did so in order to avoid having to write a thousand word essay in Europe as I travel for spring break. I am hoping to receive feedback on how well this essay connect in the grand scheme of the 3000 word argument as well as how compelling my research is. I also would like feedback on the use of my evidence and if you believe there is a better course to go down. I saw that there were comments left on my last post, but I have been so busy finishing work recently before I go on my trip that I did not get a chance to thoroughly inspect those comments which I plan on doing once I return.

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  2. davidbdale says:

    I appreciate that you got out ahead of this assignment, RS6. You demonstrate maturity and conscientiousness in planning for your “real absence” during spring break. Not to mention you’ve provided something of quality here. Thank you and congratulations.

    I wonder if, in your Introduction, you could make clear that you don’t claim that on any given day any Jersey beach provides the measurably-best wave available anywhere in the world on that day. It’s essential to your argument, I think, that you acknowledge the difference between a wave that, at this moment, is the easiest to catch, or provides the longest ride, or photographs best, or rewards the highest level of skill, or is the best in the world in any other category; and a surf that, over the course of a season, or a career, provides the best overall surfing experience based on YOUR particular set of criteria.

    You spend your Definition argument specifying those criteria; you spend your Causal argument convincing readers HOW your category (The Jersey Surf Coastline) meets all those criteria.

    If you don’t mind making necessary revisions (if any) to this draft before seeking additional feedback, I’ll be delighted to return for another look.

    See you soon (not tomorrow, I know).

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    • rowanstudent6 says:

      Just to clarify, before I make edits, you are suggesting that I explain how New Jersey surf best fits my criteria as opposed to being labeled by all as the best wave. Correct?

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      • davidbdale says:

        Yes, your Definition argument is the place to establish the criteria you use (which due to their counterintuitive nature are contrary to others’ categories) to define the Jersey surf as the world’s best. Your Causal argument will explain HOW the water, the beach, the jettys, the crowds, the temperatures, the variability, COME TO BE and/or HOW they contribute to an overall season-long or career-long superior experience.

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  3. Placed in Feedback Please after my initial round of edits. I was hoping to gain insight as to whether or not this is a better version of my draft and if I have connected my paper better to my claim and my definition argument

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    • davidbdale says:

      Some terrific new material here, RS, along with reminders throughout that the challenges MAKE the experience the best. Conditions that you named in your Categorical argument get their Causal payoff here. Nice work.

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