Enough About You – littlecow24

Money seems to have a big role in our society; we can’t do much or get far if we don’t have any. It is valuable in different ways, even when we don’t see it physically. In today’s society, faith in the government and in the banking system that money is being handled in the proper manner is necessary; if not, then we would have to hide all of our money under our mattresses or around our houses. What the banks do to take care of our money is not something everyone is aware of. Money had always been simple in my eyes; we have some or we don’t. However, while digging into this assignment, the Yap Fei, US gold, French francs, Brazilian cruzeros, and debit accounts now seem similar. We don’t actually see our money being transferred. When we get paid, we aren’t handed cash or a physical check; the money’s all directly transferred to our bank account, and we just have to trust it is faithful.

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1 Response to Enough About You – littlecow24

  1. davidbdale says:

    Nice work, LC.
    You purged all the 2nd-person violations.

    You also took a stab at editing a sentence everybody else left alone:

    However, while digging into this assignment, the Yap Fei, US gold, French francs, Brazilian cruzeros, and debit accounts now seem similar.

    The original is terrible. Your revision is much better. But your revision still suffers from a misplaced modifier. The “Yap Fei” did not dig into this assignment; you did.

    However, after digging into this assignment, I now see the Yap Fei, US gold, French francs, Brazilian cruzeros, and debit accounts as similar.

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