Visual Rewrite – Lily4Pres

Hoop | Child Car Safety | Ad Council

0:01 : The first frame of the advertisement depicts two young children of dark complexion. The camera seems to be at the children’s eye level, a couple feet in front of them. In the background, we can see what seems to be their house and the front lawn that accompanies the house. The house has a blue siding with white siding around their windows. From what is in the frame, we can see the house is a one story, also has two pillars outside the front door to support an awning. On either side of this awning, the front of the house borders some well developed bushes or tall plants. Directly leading from the front door to the two children is a brick laid pathway. The front lawn is kept very neat, seems to have been mowed recently. The only thing we can see on this lawn is the back half of a wagon on the left side of the frame. At the back of the frame, we can see a bush splitting across their lawn to divide their lawn from their neighbors. Giving off the vibe of a very typical, suburban area and suburban house layout, we can assume that the frame is being shot from the driveway that we cannot see. This would leave the driveway on the right side of the house with the majority of the lawn being on the left. The children standing on the edge of the lawn sharing the driveway.

The child on the left is a female who is holding a basketball in her right hand. She is wearing a scrimmage vest. also known as a pinnie. We can make the assumption that she is either coming home from a basketball practice, about to leave for a basketball practice, or is playing basketball outside. Under her pinnie she has a grey t-shirt with a rainbow we can at the top of the pinnie’s collar. From the size of the basketball in her hand, roughly 3/5 of her torso, we can assume she is somewhere between 6-8 years old. She has a short afro with a headband pushing the hair off her forehead. She is also chewing a piece of gum. Her eyes are fixated on something above her, simultaneously above and behind the positioning of the camera.

The child on the right is a male who is leaning on a bicycle. The boy is a about half his head shorter than what we can assume to be his sister to his left. However, he is slouching over to lean on the bike, so he is presumably a little taller, similar to his sister in height. He’s wearing a plain navy shirt with what looks like grey sweatpants or sweat-shorts of some sort. He has a short buzzcut. His eyes, like his sisters, are fixated on something above and behind the positioning of the camera.

0:06 : When the frame switches, we are enlightened that the two kids were indeed sitting at the edge of the lawn, bordering a concrete driveway. The camera has moved to the front of the driveway, revealing the rest of the house and two other figures in the driveway. These figures are presumably the mother and father of the two children. The mother is standing about 5 feet to the right of the younger brother, the mother is wearing a red and white plaid shirt with a pair of blue jeans. She is also fixated towards the same thing the two children are fixated towards. What they’re focusing on is, presumably the father, standing on top of a three-step stool eye level with a basketball net.

With the rest of the house being shown, we can see the garage which happens to be open. Revealing a grey van alongside a few bikes. With the house being shown, we can also change our previous assumption that it was a one story house, to the fact that it is a two story house.

0:09 : After a few seconds that show an interaction between the father and the other three where he seems to be boasting about the basketball net which he seemingly fixed. The net then collapses. The backboard comes off the hinges and crashes into the ground. The daughter jumps back in fright while her brother grits his teeth in disappointment. The only emotion on the mother’s face happens to be disappointment. The father, still standing atop of his stool is frozen in shock after the hoop he was just boasting about has been destroyed once again. The backboard lands right side up, pretty much staring at the camera at the front of the driveway. The frame stays like this for five whole seconds, for emphasis on the disappointment of what just occurred.

0:16 : The frame changes to a close-up of the daughter who goes on a brief monologue. With the captions on, she compares her father’s love to help her out with her net to his love with his marriage. This lead’s into a new animated frame.

0:23 : This frame is animated. The backdrop is sky blue with a small logo in the center. The logo is of a kids car seat with a seatbelt on. Under this logo, is a URL to NHTSA.gov/TheRightSeat. Through this URL and knowing it a government produced advertisement. The connection between what we just saw and their end-goal seems clear. The father went through much work to fix this basketball net for his daughter and his son. In the end, through the efforts of his love, the net still didn’t suffice for their needs. If the father is willing to put this much effort into making his children happy, he should be able to put what looks like little effort into the correct car seat to protect his children. The government producing this child safety ad makes us believe that they want to keep their children safe. No government would advertise the opposition of child safety. The link is short, giving off the vibe that it will be very simple to go this site and follow the steps there, that will presumably lead to finding children the correct car seat.

0:28 : The last frame of the video brings us back to the view of the driveway with the broken hoop on the ground. The mother who seemed to be overwhelmed with disappointment, walks away back into the house. Although this might be a stretch, this scene could possibly reference his wife leaving him if he failed to protect his children with the correct car seat (build the hoop).

This entry was posted in Lily4Pres, Portfolio Lily4Pres, Visual Rewrite FA21. Bookmark the permalink.

Leave a Reply

Fill in your details below or click an icon to log in:

WordPress.com Logo

You are commenting using your WordPress.com account. Log Out /  Change )

Google photo

You are commenting using your Google account. Log Out /  Change )

Twitter picture

You are commenting using your Twitter account. Log Out /  Change )

Facebook photo

You are commenting using your Facebook account. Log Out /  Change )

Connecting to %s