Summaries-ILoveDunkinOverStarbucks

It seems counterintuitive that the circus is named “The Greatest Show on Earth” when the animals are not treated well. After the one elephant Kenny started to get sick during one show and had little interest in eating after the first show of the day he presented diarrhea and then started to bleed. The vet had said he would be fine after taking off from the evening show and taking some antibiotics. Although being advised to not have Kenny perform they put him in the show anyway even though he was visibly too weak to perform. After his last performance he was give fluids to rehydrate but disaster struck when two hours later his body was found in his stall covered in blood. Without a tip to animal rights activists the public may never have known about Kenny’s death or who was responsible to be charged with making Kenny perform ill and performing without proper vet care. Due to there being an actual body being found the USDA was now able to start action against the King Royal Circus with a fine of $200,000. Due to this and an opened settlement the USDA opened a new door in the animal rights movement. Not only was there judgement against Feld Entertainment but records started to surface of videos, investigative files, vet records, circus train logs, and court testimonies. Due to one elephant’s horrid death it brought up not only the abuse and mistreatment happening at the time but also the dark history of how they treated these animals since the beginning of the start of animals in the circus.

It seems counterintuitive that a beautiful bustling city like Vancouver is ridden with drugs. Vancouver described to have a So-Ho like feel with tall scenic glass apartments and Audi’s all over the streets, while being a beautiful city it is also a port city which means drugs coming in by boat from the Pacific. The stretch of town called Downtown Eastside just minutes away from the scenic tourist part of Vancouver is the epicenter of the drug problem. To start to control the heroin problem they set up a safe zone where addicts can “shoot up” under the supervision of a nurse and without the worry of being arrested. This way they are getting clean heroine, clean needles, wipes, and other instruments to stay safe while shooting. While it may sound easy it is only available under doctor prescription and involves 26 people. With heroin being readily available it will keep people from being found dead in the streets or selling themselves for money to get the drugs. With everyone having a different opinion there is a group out there that does not like the idea of this and they believe that we are just killing these people with the same drugs they get on the street but in a cleaner, and nicer way.

It seems counterintuitive that we can decide when someone dies. Every hospital that you step foot in there will be someone in there that has no quality of life and is living off machines like Charles Orstein’s Mother. She has been admitted to the hospital for nausea, cough, and not being able to keep food down where these symptoms had turned into her being in a coma and requiring a ventilator after her heart had stopped while a nurse tried to insert a nasogastric tube. Doctor’s were unsure of what went wrong and what caused it but they strongly advised that she be removed from the ventilator. With his mother’s wishes being that she does not what to be artificially kept alive unless there is a true recovery. But the family was at a cross roads they had a what if mindset, what if she wakes up, what if she can recover but on the other hand what if she does not wake up, what if the doctor’s are wrong and she can wake up. Due to personal experiences with his dad beating the odds they wondering what if mom can beat the odds too and wake up just like dad beat the odds of not having a full recovery after his heart stopped for ten minutes. Test after test was ran to see if she had a chance if woken up could she have a full brain recovery, but tests came back and it did not look good. Two choices were present either move her to hospice with the same equipment to keep her alive or disconnect her and allow life to take its course. In the end it was decided to allow her to go how she would have wanted, naturally as she was able to breathe for a few hours on her own before she died naturally and peacefully, but this death was not decided for her as her family decided when to take her off the ventilator.

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2 Responses to Summaries-ILoveDunkinOverStarbucks

  1. davidbdale says:

    Hey, Dunkin, these are generally strong and coherent, but they all suffer from wordiness, and at least one wavers in its point of view.
    Cut WAY DOWN on your use of “Due to” to begin sentences. It’s the best choice only one time in about a thousand. Here are examples from your Circus piece.

    Due to there being an actual body being found the USDA was now able to start action against the King Royal Circus with a fine of $200,000.

    —Because a body was found, the USDA was able to levy a $200,000 fine against the King Royal Circus.

    Due to this and an opened settlement the USDA opened a new door in the animal rights movement.

    —This and a settlement let the USDA open a new door in the animal rights movement.

    Due to one elephant’s horrid death it brought up not only the abuse and mistreatment happening at the time but also the dark history of how they treated these animals since the beginning of the start of animals in the circus.

    —One elephant’s horrid death highlighted not only current abuse but also the dark history of animal mistreatment since the founding of the circus.

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  2. davidbdale says:

    For a Purposeful Summary, your Vancouver example does not clearly identify its point of view. I guess it’s counterintuitive that a beautiful city should have a drug problem. But what you describe more fully seems to be the real counterintuitivity: that the city provides the drugs to its addicts. Instead of identifying a multiplicity of responses, a PS will guide readers to adopt the “right” one.

    Again, you appear willing to let your readers decide what’s counterintuitive (or what’s the appropriate ethical response) about your narrative. As a person, you may be ambivalent, Dunkin, but as a writer with a Purposeful Summary assignment to fulfill, you are compelled to declare your values, not by stating them, but by giving your reader no choice but to draw “the best” conclusion.

    Revise these if you’re willing and interested, Dunkin. They could benefit from revision. Either way, I expect you to respond to demonstrate your respect for the feedback process. Thanks!

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