Summaries-lokiofasgard24

Do Toms Shoes Really help People?

It seams counterintuitive that the premise of “buy one, give one” companies fail to address the real problems that developing worlds face. For Toms to go into a community and give out shoes, the consumers of these goods begin to expect that when their shoes grow old they will be gifted new ones. “Give a man a fish, you feed him for a day. Teach a man to fish, you feed him for a lifetime.” If they can create their own market and production systems for making shoes or any-other types of goods the people in the community would benefit long term. The aid that these people need does not lie under handouts, they require teaching and mentorship for improved quality of life.

Free Heroin to Battle Addiction

It seam counterintuitive that addicts are given heroin “safely” to keep them out of the way of law abiding citizens. Is this a desperate final effort to help the worst of the worst addicts or is it killing them in the nicest way possible. Many rehab workers have had successful results in even the worst cases. Understandably sometimes it may not work out but feeding their addiction so that they don’t bother anyone else feels wrong. The heroin safe zones create a class of people that are dead but still ticking. The government gives up on them but cant execute them, instead they are just keeps out of everyone else’s way to seam morally correct.

Does Using Paper Take CO2 Out of the Environment?

It seams counterintuitive that paper holds on to carbon for a very short period of time but we recycle paper anyway. Eventually, paper decomposes and releases its carbon into the atmosphere, turning into the harmful carbon dioxide. As on piece of paper goes through the recycling process, it will evidently expel all its carbon content, defeating the purpose of paper being recycled.

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1 Response to Summaries-lokiofasgard24

  1. davidbdale says:

    Loki, I appreciate your request for feedback. Since you didn’t specify what kind of help you seek, I’ll conduct my usual process of analyzing the first of your three entries and hope the notes will apply to your others.

    It seams counterintuitive that the premise of “buy one, give one” companies fail to address the real problems that developing worlds face.

    —seems
    —how many developing worlds are there?
    —It does seem counterintuitive that “buy one, give one” companies fail to address real needs, but it’s the companies, not the premise that fails. Why mention the premise?

    For Toms to go into a community and give out shoes, the consumers of these goods begin to expect that when their shoes grow old they will be gifted new ones.

    —Opening with “For” sets up a logic that your sentence does not follow. Flip it to convince yourself: “Consumers start to expect replacement shoes for Toms to give out shoes”?
    —Is this different from a food bank? Because it’s open every Monday, “consumers” expect they can get food again next week? How does that fail to meet their real need for food?
    —I assume you mean (and I don’t mean to suggest you’re advocating your own true position; writing exercises don’t have to be sincere), that giving away shoes or food doesn’t solve chronic shoelessness or hunger, or help people grow their own food.

    “Give a man a fish, you feed him for a day. Teach a man to fish, you feed him for a lifetime.”

    —”Teach a man to fish who lives in the desert, and he’ll still be hungry.”

    If they can create their own market and production systems for making shoes or any-other types of goods the people in the community would benefit long term.

    —Giving away shoes might actually be devastating to a nascent local shoe-making industry. Should Toms instead be investing in the local economy by supporting local shoemakers? Do we get to decide what sort of benevolence other people bestow?

    The aid that these people need does not lie under handouts, they require teaching and mentorship for improved quality of life.

    —Word choice is very odd. “lie under handouts”?
    —Your sentence is an illegal comma-splice.

    I love your brevity, but the best writing is not only brief, it’s packed with claims.

    I hope this was helpful, Loki. Whether or not you revise this post, I expect you to respond to indicate your respect for the process. Otherwise, I’ll be less likely to help in the future. Thanks!

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