Summaries – Lunaduna

1. Do Toms Shoes Help Anbody?

It seems counterintuitive that companies who say “buy one, give one” does not actually figure a way to actually solve the poverty problems the world faces today. Many of these types of companies have to deal with people thinking whether or not this is true. When Toms donates shoes, people believe, that they will be gifted new ones once the old news wear out. 

In most cases, Toms donates the shoes in school to children, who most likely already has a pair of shoes. Similarity, a handful of companies use the premise “buy one, give one” to use people into buying the products. Sometimes it is false advertising, and the higher ups gain the money instead of donating. These companies need to aid the poverty in the right way. The poverty stricken community need the aid they can, that will help them the rest of their life, rather than for the time being. 

https://www.motherjones.com/environment/2012/05/toms-shoes-buy-one-give-one/

2. Anne Frank’s Diary 

It seems counterintuitive that one of the most acknowledged diary, is not the full truth. Anne Frank knew she wanted to publish her diary, so she went back and rewrote her existing entries. The feelings that she had at a young age were erased, meaning that the diary is a work of fiction. 

Anne Frank’s diary has never been taken seriously as literature. Reasons include, it was a diary, and it was written by a young girl. It is uttermost to say that the diary is fiction, but it should not be named as a historical document. Judith Thurman mentioned the skill that Anne Frank achieved in constructing her narrative. Even though the skill is subjective, it does not qualify as a document that should be worshipped. Although the diary may not be historical, Anne Frank should still be recognized as the wonderful writer she would have come to be.

https://www.npr.org/templates/story/story.php?storyId=113198365

3. White Folks get Prozac 

It seems counterintuitive that one of the most used antidepressants is going under investigation of how it’s being used. More in-depth, these medications are being prescribed have nothing to do with the health status of the patient. Health experts believe that doctors who prescribe Prozac have nothing to do with the patient’s mental health rather than their race, or health insurance. 

Prozac has been one of the best antidepressants for years. It was first introduced in the year 1987, and it “hit the jackpot.” Patients that have mental health issues such as anxiety, or depression, are prescribed these medications. There are always improvements within the healthcare system, including ethics. Relationships between the doctor and their patient do need to be improved. Although that is a problem, a patient’s race or health insurance status should have to do with the health care they need to receive. 

https://www.motherjones.com/politics/2012/04/prescription-antidepressants-race-ethnicity-health-insurance/

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2 Responses to Summaries – Lunaduna

  1. davidbdale says:

    Lunaduna, I can probably find my way to your sources without links, but please provide them when the assignment calls for them. It’s good practice for posts that truly need them. I’ll produce a “How to Link to Sources” video as soon as I can.

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  2. davidbdale says:

    Thanks for the links, LunaDuna. My practice on these Summaries has been to provide feedback on just one of the entries and count on that advice to assist you in revising all three. I hope it works for you. Let me know if you need more help AFTER you make significant improvements to the first one.

    It seems counterintuitive that companies who say “buy one, give one” does not actually figure a way to actually solve the poverty problems the world faces today.

    —This is a reasonable observation, Luna, but seems incredibly unfair to the company doing the giving. Food banks give food away (they don’t even demand that you buy something first), but nobody expects them to “solve poverty.” You’re holding Toms to an incredibly high standard.

    Many of these types of companies have to deal with people thinking whether or not this is true.

    —Your dependence on the vague pronouns “these” and “this” probably didn’t seem significant before last week’s class, Luna, but I hope that my little lecture about avoiding “it and this” shed new light on the importance of substituting specific details for those pronouns.

    Beware of IT and THIS

    When Toms donates shoes, people believe, that they will be gifted new ones once the old news wear out.

    —Your commas create serious confusion here, Luna. What I think you mean is that the people who receive shoes believe they’ll later also receive replacement shoes. More importantly, you make a claim that might not be contained in the source material. I don’t see any suggestion that the recipients think they’ll ALWAYS get new shoes. (Either way, get rid of that second comma. Ask if you’re unclear why it’s confusing.)

    In most cases, Toms donates the shoes in school to children, who most likely already has a pair of shoes.

    —Your second comma is a problem here too. I doubt any reader will understand why children in school “most likely already HAVE shoes.”

    Similarity, a handful of companies use the premise “buy one, give one” to use people into buying the products.

    —What does “use people into buying products” mean? I’m curious why you want to involve other companies at this point. If you’re not going to cite another example, it’s not fair to just say “other companies do this too.”

    Sometimes it is false advertising, and the higher ups gain the money instead of donating.

    —WHOA. Now you’re making SUCH a broad argument it’s hard to understand the primary purpose of your summary. If you’re going to catalog the many ways these programs can fail, you should preview the scope of your argument in your first sentence or two.

    These companies need to aid the poverty in the right way.

    —Nobody needs to “aid the poverty,” Luna. The poverty is doing fine without any help. You should be urging the companies to “alleviate poverty” or “reduce poverty” or “solve the problem of poverty.”

    The poverty stricken community need the aid they can, that will help them the rest of their life, rather than for the time being.

    —Your first comma creates the same problem your other problem commas solve.

    Would you appreciate a fuller explanation of the comma problem?

    If grades are important to you, you should take advantage of the opportunity to upgrade your post by revising it and putting it back into the Feedback Please category for a second look. Either way, I do expect you to respond. Thanks!

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