Purposeful Summaries – Sunflower

Posted on February 7, 2023 by sunflower0311
  1. Mormon Baptist Targets Anne Frank

It seems counterintuitive that someone could be baptized after they have already passed away. What could possibly be even more counterintuitive is baptizing someone who has passed away in a faith that they never followed. However, that is exactly what happened to Anne Frank.

Anne Frank was baptized via proxy in a Mormon Temple in the Dominican Republic. This event directly went against a pact between Jewish leaders and the Mormon church where the Mormon church vowed to stop baptizing holocaust victims.

In addition to Anne Frank, Elie Wiesel is also set to be baptized despite the fact that he is still living. Wiesel as well as other Jewish leaders have campaigned against the practice and encouraged high ranking Mormons such as Mitt Romney to speak out against it as well. However, they did not receive any help from Mitt Romney or any comment from the church.

Despite clear protests from surviving Holocaust survivors as well as the pact made in 1995, Mormon churches continue to perform these proxy baptisms on those who have passed on and can no longer consent to it.

2. Vancouver Combats Heroin by Giving its Addicts the best Smack in the World

It seems counterintuitive that to combat a city’s heroin problem they are actually providing heroin to addicts. However, in Vancouver that is exactly what they are doing.

In Vancouver doctors are prescribing free heroin two to three times a day for certain people. This program is currently being used for twenty-six people who are described as those who were not able to take to heroin alternatives when trying to get clean.

This program benefits the city because by providing these people with enough doses of heroine to keep them comfortable helps reduce the harm caused to themselves or society. The patients would be less likely to have to use shady methods to obtain the cash they would normally need for heroin since they are being given it for free.

Surprisingly this program has no interest in helping addicts get clean. Instead, it acts as a form of blackmail to reduce the problems caused by heroin addicts.

Despite how shocking this idea of providing free heroin to addicts is, it seems like it would be a successful program.

3. Figure Skating Judges Get a 10 for Duplicity

It seems counterintuitive that there would be bias in one of the biggest sporting events in the world however, for the Winter Olympic event of figure skating there is a lot more bias and corruption then one might think.

In figure skating performer’s score tended to be higher when a judge who shared the same home country as the performer sat on the panel. In addition, vote trading often takes place. To combat this the rules were changed so that judge’s scores were made anonymous however this only increased favoritism towards one’s home country.

Some suggestions to this problem included making the judge’s scores public and have researchers look into any bias or corruption. Another suggestion is to follow what ski jumping does and have a figure skating committee choose the judges.

While this challenge with judging seems like a hard one to combat it is important to recognize that something certainly needs to change in order to make the competition fair.

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8 Responses to Purposeful Summaries – Sunflower

  1. sunflower0311 says:
    February 9, 2023 at 10:17 am

    I just would like to know if this is what you are looking for when doing purposeful summaries. I would also like to know if there is anything I need to improve.

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    • davidbdale says:
      February 13, 2023 at 8:36 am

      In general, these are exactly what I’m looking for from Purposeful Summaries, Sunflower. You’ve identified counterintuitive angles to the material, as instructed, and you’ve identified the pertinent information to support your overall claim.

      You make way too many grammar and punctuation errors for a student looking for the highest grades. I can help you with that in a second round of feedback if you like.

      In our first round, though, I want to provide overall structural feedback about essay building.

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  2. davidbdale says:
    February 13, 2023 at 8:48 am

    1. Mormon Baptist Targets Anne Frank

    It seems counterintuitive that someone could be baptized after they have already passed away. What could possibly be even more counterintuitive is baptizing someone who has passed away in a faith that they never followed. However, that is exactly what happened to Anne Frank.

    —Here you focus our attention on the idiocy of “baptism after death.” It’s crazy, all right, but it’s just one of the counterintuitive points you could be making. The other obvious choice is baptizing an adult into a religion they don’t believe in. You try to have it both ways, but your claim is a little confusing: “someone who has passed away in a faith they never followed” is hard to follow.

    Anne Frank was baptized via proxy in a Mormon Temple in the Dominican Republic. This event directly went against a pact between Jewish leaders and the Mormon church where the Mormon church vowed to stop baptizing holocaust victims.

    —In this paragraph, if you built it right, you could identify Frank BOTH as a Holocaust victim and and as someone who has been dead for 80 years, then tell us Mormons have pledged to baptize neither.

    In addition to Anne Frank, Elie Wiesel is also set to be baptized despite the fact that he is still living. Wiesel as well as other Jewish leaders have campaigned against the practice and encouraged high ranking Mormons such as Mitt Romney to speak out against it as well. However, they did not receive any help from Mitt Romney or any comment from the church.

    —”despite the fact that he is still living” switches our attention oddly. You complained that Frank was baptized after death; now you take issue with Wiesel’s baptism while he’s alive.

    Despite clear protests from surviving Holocaust survivors as well as the pact made in 1995, Mormon churches continue to perform these proxy baptisms on those who have passed on and can no longer consent to it.

    —You attempt the same “both-feet-ism” here, too. Holocaust “survivors” are still alive. Frank isn’t. Does the pact prohibit both?

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  3. davidbdale says:
    February 13, 2023 at 8:59 am

    2. Vancouver Combats Heroin by Giving its Addicts the best Smack in the World

    It seems counterintuitive that to combat a city’s heroin problem they are actually providing heroin to addicts. However, in Vancouver that is exactly what they are doing.

    —The only people in this paragraph are the addicts, so when you say “they” and then again “they,” we’re confused why addicts are providing heroin to themselves. What’s counterintuitive here ISN’T that Vancouver is fixing a problem, but that any government agency would feed a drug addiction with more drugs.

    In Vancouver doctors are prescribing free heroin two to three times a day for certain people. This program is currently being used for twenty-six people who are described as those who were not able to take to heroin alternatives when trying to get clean.

    —We’re still waiting to know who “they” are, so maybe we should be asking doctors why they’re drugging their patients? Is that the point?

    This program benefits the city because by providing these people with enough doses of heroine to keep them comfortable helps reduce the harm caused to themselves or society. The patients would be less likely to have to use shady methods to obtain the cash they would normally need for heroin since they are being given it for free.

    —This actually describes the “harm reduction” benefit of the program nicely. Maybe you’re more in favor of free heroin than you’re letting on.

    Surprisingly this program has no interest in helping addicts get clean. Instead, it acts as a form of blackmail to reduce the problems caused by heroin addicts.

    —Readers will not understand the “blackmail” angle, I think. I don’t either. Blackmail works when I compel you to act by threatening to make your dirty secret public. Nothing like that is going on here. Right?

    Despite how shocking this idea of providing free heroin to addicts is, it seems like it would be a successful program.

    —After your negative spin, this conclusion is surprising. In such a short essay, you should be able to maintain one pervasive “take.”

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  4. davidbdale says:
    February 13, 2023 at 9:12 am

    3. Figure Skating Judges Get a 10 for Duplicity

    It seems counterintuitive that there would be bias in one of the biggest sporting events in the world however, for the Winter Olympic event of figure skating there is a lot more bias and corruption then one might think.

    —This is pretty good, Sunflower, but maybe the clearer “disconnect” is between the ugliness (of corruption and cheating) against the sport that is judged on beauty and grace.

    In figure skating performer’s score tended to be higher when a judge who shared the same home country as the performer sat on the panel. In addition, vote trading often takes place. To combat this the rules were changed so that judge’s scores were made anonymous however this only increased favoritism towards one’s home country.

    —You’re the guide for your readers. You make a good point about “home” favoritism. You expect a lot from readers to understand the leap to “vote trading.” You expect even more asking us to understand how anonymity would solve that problem. Is the real counterintuitivity THERE?, that somebody thought secret ballots would be fairer?

    Some suggestions to this problem included making the judge’s scores public and have researchers look into any bias or corruption. Another suggestion is to follow what ski jumping does and have a figure skating committee choose the judges.

    —We feel that oddness, which you propose might be solved by TURNING THEM BACK to public? And then a final suggestion that a committee could choose judges, which we don’t understand because we don’t know how they’re currently chosen.

    While this challenge with judging seems like a hard one to combat it is important to recognize that something certainly needs to change in order to make the competition fair.

    —You appear to be as daunted as we are. If you’re going to address this situation in a couple hundred words, you might have to narrow your focus, Sunflower. My recommendation would be the “home bias” problem.

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  5. davidbdale says:
    February 13, 2023 at 9:16 am

    After all that, I’d be surprised if you’re not a little bit discouraged, Sunflower, but again, this is quality work overall. My job is to prod and goad you in the direction of excellence if you’re willing. Is this helpful? You can always revise for grade improvement, even on small assignments, as long as we’re engaged in a Feedback conversation.

    By all means Reply, please. I always have more feedback available, but I stop providing it if you don’t respond.

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