Causal-Ziggy026

I could use some help getting started, but here is what I have so far.

The minimum drinking age has caused young adults to, for lack of a better phrase, go crazy when they turn 21. They drink excessively and do not know their limits with alcohol, and in turn go out for a night of drinks and then get behind the wheel to go home, most times not making it there. This shows us that the minimum drinking age results in a higher number of drunk driving incidents once people turn 21. If people are let loose into the world once they turn 21 and have free rein to consume any type and any amount of alcohol they wish they are bound to face a less than favorable outcome.

I’m not sure where to go from here without sounding repetitive, but I know it needs to be significantly longer.

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3 Responses to Causal-Ziggy026

  1. davidbdale says:

    Being able to state your premise succinctly isn’t a bad thing, Ziggy. It leaves you room to illustrate, amplify, compare, and demonstrate.

    Illustrate. You show us a typical scene of over-indulgence at a 21st birthday party of someone who has rigorously complied with the underage alcohol ban. This is necessary if you’re going to be persuasive because many in your audience will be doubting that anybody actually complies with the law. Obviously, if late-teenagers and 20-year-olds are already getting routinely sloshed, your argument that turning 21 will turn them into dangerous drunk drivers loses its power.

    Amplify. You cite actual statistical evidence of the devastation “newly-legal” drinkers cause on the highways. Is it true, for example, that drivers in their early 20s where the drinking age is 21 do more than their statistically-proportional share of the drunk-driver killing and mayhem?

    Compare. If you’re going to convince anyone that the 21-year-old drinking age is a bad idea (and especially if you’re going to recommend a specific alternative), you’ll need some evidence from a place, a jurisdiction, a culture, where 18-year-olds can legally both drink and drive. Maybe a culture that doesn’t discourage (or outright ban) alcohol consumption among minors. Maybe one that does a better job of easing youth into responsible alcohol consumption instead of springing it on them at a magical date.

    Demonstrate. If those steps pan out, you take your readers through the alternate universe you’re concocting for their consideration, the one in which youth get some early experience with booze that familiarizes them with the havoc it wreaks on their perceptions and physical abilities at about the same time that it puts them behind the wheel of a several-ton killing machine.

    Does that sound like a plan to use 1000 words to your advantage? (I require your response, Ziggy, to prove your respect for the Feedback process.) Thanks!

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  2. davidbdale says:

    PS: I changed the spelling from CASUAL to CAUSAL in your post name.

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