Definition Rewrite- friendoftacos

Lowering the Rate of Abortions

Abortion is the termination of a pregnancy. The vast majority of abortions result from unplanned pregnancies. Typically, unplanned pregnancies result from misuse or no use of contraceptives. Some accidental pregnancies result from incest or rape. Carrying a baby to term and raising it is a large emotional and physical responsibility. Taking care of a child can be a massive undertaking that would be unwelcome by someone who did not plan for having a child. There are many reasons women would want to terminate their pregnancy. One reason is that pregnancies become unwanted because a woman is concerned for her health and well-being. Another reason is that the financial demands for raising a child may also be too difficult for a woman to handle. Not being able to afford a child would be a danger to the woman and the baby. Women may not want to raise a child that they did not plan for because they may be unready to be a parent. A woman who has an unplanned pregnancy may not want a child because it would interfere with her lifestyle and other responsibilities. A planned pregnancy is life-changing. Forcing a woman who did not plan to be pregnant into giving birth to a child could be harmful to her life. Preventing unwanted pregnancies and the hospitalization of women would require more access to contraceptives and more safe sex education.


An abortion can either be “safe” or an “unsafe” abortion to end the women’s pregnancy. The World Health Organization (WHO) defines safe abortions “when they are carried out with a method that is recommended by WHO and that is appropriate to the pregnancy duration, and when the person carrying out the abortion has the necessary skills.” On the other hand, unsafe abortions are abortions that happen when the people, environment, skills, and medical precautions are not up to the World Health Organization’s standards. Unsafe abortions increase the risk of death for the woman who is carrying the fetus. Due to unsafe abortions, around 7 million women are hospitalized every year in developing countries. To prevent the hospitalization of women the stoppage of unwanted pregnancies would be a solution.


To help prevent unwanted pregnancies the use of contraceptives would be an effective solution. Lack of knowledge about contraceptives is a reason that some women may not use them. The women do not know how contraceptives work and how to get ahold of contraceptives in their lives. Women may also choose not to use contraceptives because they believe that contraceptives will have a negative impact on their bodies. For example, some women may believe that the birth control pill could cause infertility. Another reason is that some women may use contraceptives incorrectly because they do not know how to properly use them. This lack of knowledge about contraceptives does not help women and further increases their chances of an unwanted pregnancy.


The lack of access to contraceptives can also be a reason that unwanted pregnancies happen and result in abortion. In the study by Clinicalkey, they mention in their article that “It has been estimated that 125 million women have unmet needs for family planning, mostly in the developing countries.” There is a lack of resources and access to contraceptives for millions of women. The only form of contraceptive available to many women is unsafe abortion. The lack of resources to receive contraceptives and the lack of availability can ultimately result in an unplanned pregnancy and ultimately abortion.


Since many women do not know how to properly use contraceptives, education should be adapted to the women’s understanding so that they can learn how to properly use contraceptives. Changing the education to the level that women may require is a good way to make sure the success of contraceptive understanding in women is higher. Having information about contraceptives available to women is not effective if the women cannot understand and put the information into practice. Sexual education for both men and women is essentially important. Without proper sexual education, there would be a possibility that the rate of unplanned pregnancies would be much higher. When sexual education is in place in many people’s lives, it teaches people how to responsibly have sex. In the Clinicalkey study, sexual education is shown to delay the initiation of sexual intercourse, reduce the number of sexually active young adults, and greatly prevent unplanned pregnancy in many women. To reduce the number of abortions, increasing complete sexual education in young adults would effectively do that.


The price of contraceptives for women who need them may not be available to them due to their affordability. Contraceptives may also have to either be free or greatly reduced in price otherwise they will remain inaccessible to most women. Providing money to areas of education for women and affordability of contraceptives could drastically change the unplanned pregnancy rate of that area. Financially supporting many women who want and need to receive contraceptives would greatly reduce the number of unplanned pregnancies and thus reduce the number of abortions in that location that needs to financially supports women’s contraceptives.


There are many different reasons a woman may want to terminate her pregnancy. Those reasons can include the large responsibility of a child, the finical burden that a child can put on someone’s income, and changing someone’s lifestyle or previous life plans. There are two types of abortions. One type of abortion follows the World Health Organizations’ requirements and is considered safe for the woman. The other type of abortion does not follow these medical requirements and is considered unsafe. Unsafe abortions can have a negative impact on a woman’s health and can result in hospitalization. To help prevent unwanted pregnancies the knowledge and access to contraceptives should be available to women. Extensive sexual education can also contribute to the proper use of contraceptives and people having responsible sexual intercourse. By reducing the costs of contraceptives many women will have more access to these essential devices in their lives. Implementing many of these solutions can create a decline in abortions.

References

World Health Organization. (n.d.). Preventing unsafe abortion. World Health Organization. Retrieved October 10, 2021, from https://www.who.int/news-room/fact-sheets/detail/preventing-unsafe-abortion

World Health Organization. (2014, November 28). WHO | Preventing unsafe abortion. https://www.who.int/reproductivehealth/topics/unsafe_abortion/hrpwork/en/

The Right Way to Reduce Abortion. (2006, October 23). Center for American Progress. https://www.americanprogress.org/issues/women/news/2006/01/20/1796/the-right-way-to-reduce-abortion/

Haddad, L. B., & Nour, N. M. (2009). Unsafe abortion: Unnecessary maternal mortality. Reviews in obstetrics & gynecology. Retrieved October 10, 2021, from https://www.ncbi.nlm.nih.gov/pmc/articles/PMC2709326/

Haddad, L. B., & Nour, N. M. (2009). Unsafe abortion: Unnecessary maternal mortality. Reviews in obstetrics & gynecology. Retrieved October 10, 2021, from https://www.guttmacher.org/state-policy/explore/insurance-coverage-contraceptives#

Clinicalkey. ClinicalKey. (n.d.). Retrieved October 10, 2021, from https://www.clinicalkey.com/#!/content/playContent/1-s2.0-S1521693410000180?returnurl=null&referrer=null

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3 Responses to Definition Rewrite- friendoftacos

  1. davidbdale says:

    Tacos, Do you want detailed comments on small aspects of your writing, or do you first want a very general impression of the overall argument?

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  2. davidbdale says:

    MY OVERALL IMPRESSION OF THE ARGUMENT:

    Paragraph 1 establishes that unwanted pregnancies are common, unwise for the mother, perhaps dangerous for her, and unfortunate. It ends with a mild ethical claim that preventing unwanted pregnancies would require more access to contraceptives and more safe sex education.

    —What it DOESN’T do is argue that the child who results from an unplanned or unwanted pregnancy is in danger of neglect, poor care, poor health, and abuse, or perhaps just a life of being cycled through a brutal foster care system. By focusing its argument on the pregnant woman, your argument squanders the powerful rhetorical leverage of making readers sympathize with the poor unplanned, unwanted child.

    Paragraph 2 claims that unsafe abortions don’t meet the standards of the WHO, that 7 million hospitalizations are the result, and that the solution is to eliminate unwanted pregnancies.

    —What the argument DOESN’T do is share with readers what the WHO standards amount to. Consequently, we’re left wondering whether those standards might be too stringent or too lenient. If we’re going to accept your claim, we should have some understanding of what we’re agreeing to. Your argument also does not compel us to agree that the only solution to eliminating hospitalization is to eliminate unwanted pregnancy. Still available as options are 1) the promotion of safer abortions and 2) the banning of abortions altogether, since they seem to be the problem.

    Paragraph 3 establishes, perhaps needlessly, that avoidance or poor implementation of contraceptives leads to unwanted pregnancies.

    —What the argument DOESN’T do is support its claims with anything like evidence. If we’re going to solve the unwanted pregnancy problem TO AVOID the larger problem of BAD ABORTIONS, we’ll need to know how big the problem is, what percentage can be addressed by making contraceptives available to those who know how to use them, what percentage by educating those who need instruction, what percentage to those who have and understand them but simply reject them (and what percentage we should be blaming on their male partners who could obviously play a part too in avoiding unplanned pregnancies).

    Paragraph 4 establishes a very broad global number for “unmet needs” for contraception.

    —What it DOESN’T do is (since you’ve raised the issue yourself) distinguish between types of unmet needs. Are these 125 million women unable to get contraceptives, unable to afford them, uneducated in their use, or unwilling to use them? Also, since your number is global, it won’t be much use if your more specific argument is about unsafe abortions in the United States.

    Paragraph 5 claims that sex education could prevent unwanted pregnancy in two ways 1) by making women more aware of the consequences of sex, and 2) delaying early sexual activity.

    —What it doesn’t do for 1) is provide compelling specific evidence. For example, what is it young women need to know to prevent pregnancy? An illustration would be helpful. Do adolescents think ovulation is a particularly fertile time to be avoided? Or do they think it’s a safe time to engage in sex without contraception? That sort of MIS-education would nicely illustrate the need for correct information.
    —What is DOESN’T do for 2) is convince us of the legitimacy of the Clinicalkey study. Was it big? Was it local? Was it recent? Was it conducted by a respected scientific or governmental entity?

    Paragraph 6 claims merely that contraceptives may be too expensive.

    —What it DOESN’T do is suggest how or why that situation might change. It would be equally easy to say that the price of bicycles makes them unavailable to unmarried young women, but no bike manufacturer and no government would feel compelled to give bikes away or subsidize their cost. Who has the incentive to make contraceptives more readily available? Your claim doesn’t have much punch if the answer is no one.

    Paragraph 7 provides a summary of your Definition Argument.

    —What it DOESN’T do is anything else. We don’t really need to be reminded of the material we read just a few paragraphs earlier, Tacos, but we would benefit from knowing what all your claims add up to. For example:

    —If you shared with us a number of women who have died in unsafe abortions.
    —If you shared with us a number of unwanted pregnancies that occur here in the US.
    —If you tallied the cost of running foster care programs for children abandoned to “the system.”
    —If you reminded us in general of the psychological costs to both the unwanted child and the mother who gives up a child.
    —If you shared a statistic of the percentage of incarcerated Americans who were unwanted, abandoned to foster care, or given up for adoption.

    In other words, if you let us know the terrible toll of our failure to make cheap, guilt-free contraception available to every responsible, sexually-active person, . . .

    then we would conclude, with you, that society as a whole would benefit from a decline in unwanted pregnancies.

    Does that help?

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