Summaries – thirdlady226


It seems counterintuitive that we, as Americans, are aware of many small but imminent dangers in our lives and continue to think that we are invincible. Small things like slipping in the shower or or not locking a ladder properly threaten us everyday.

We tend to obsess about the unimportant things in our lives, when other things we do are careless and dangerous. We just don’t stop to think about them like that. Other cultures are acutely aware of the every-day dangers they face. They have less trivial things in their lives to distract them from being thoughtful and careful with their lives; the most precious things they – and we – could ever own.


It seems counterintuitive that our human psyches process things in a backward manner a lot of the time. If we get praised for good work on an assignment or a job that we’re doing, we relax. Therefore, we tend to not do as well the next time. The opposite seems to also be true. Harsh words or punishment for a job poorly done seems to motivate, as we don’t want to suffer embarrassment again.

We visit a doctor only when it seems as if we are really sick; it seems to make more sense to get more regular check-ups when we’re healthy, and catch illnesses in the beginning before they get worse. But our minds don’t think that way, we don’t think we need a doctor unless we know there is something abnormal about our health.


It seems counterintuitive that technology for monitoring brain activity has been around since the 50’s but we’re only tapping it’s true potential now. With the EEG and ECoG systems, we can monitor the brainwaves of the disabled and help them communicate effectively with us, making it possible to restore our personal relationships with someone who suffered a terrible illness or accident.

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1 Response to Summaries – thirdlady226

  1. davidbdale says:

    1. I like your brevity, thirdlady, but your work in this summary is not clear. The first sentence makes a good observation that we know but ignore dangers that could kill us. Oddly, it indicates that this behavior is American.

    Your second paragraph begins unintelligibly. What’s the point of comparing “unimportant things” with “careless and dangerous” actions? Are the unimportant things those that can’t kill us? Are they dangers like our planes falling from the sky? How is that unimportant? By the time you get to “We just don’t stop to think about them like that, your readers are lost. From there to the end this reader, at least, stays lost. Most of the ambiguity could be resolved by substituting clearer terms for the “things” that overpopulate your summary.

    (You have a common problem with every day and everyday. These are correct uses: 1) People die every day; 2) We are in danger from everyday objects. There is no correct use for every-day.)

    2. Nice work but tentative. Too many seems. The first one is mine: “It seems counterintuitive.” The rest are yours. Consider replacing all the qualified statements with bolder claims.
    —Therefore, we don’t do as well the next time.
    —The opposite is also true.
    —Harsh words motivate.
    —We visit a doctor only when we’re really sick.
    —It makes more sense to go when we’re healthy.
    —We avoid doctors until we’re certain we’re sick.

    3. Nice writing, but wow, you’ve really stretched the facts of this material far. That we can detect that they are experiencing loudness is some distance from your claim that we can rebuild our relationships with those who can’t communicate with us, don’t you think, thirdlady?


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