A10: Definition Rewrite

Are you Natural? Is that Natural? What is Natural? African american women deem the term natural to be described in many ways so that there cannot be one definitive description of the word. Being natural can mean wearing your hair with no extensions or relaxers, but also isn’t the hair that women use for extensions natural human hair? So, what does natural really mean?

When thinking of the term Natural your mind automatically thinks of Afros, long curly hair with no chemicals or no extensions just your hair. Well it does mean that. Being natural in the African american community shows that you have a strong meaning in life; you want to represent yourself as a strong black women. The self confidence you have in yourself is at an all time high. Wearing your hair natural is the way to go now in present times. The women who use relaxer and wear weave are considered un-natural.

African american women who wear weave or relaxer in my eyes can be categorized as natural too. When using relaxer you are simply straightening the curls of your natural hair so that it looks nice. Women that wear weave are using the natural human hair of other human beings so why can’t they be apart of the natural movement? They’re using natural human hair. to the naturalist it does not count, but to the Non-Naturalist they bought it and it is natural hair from another humans head. It seems natural, but is it?

Natural can be described in many ways and seen or looked at in many ways. That is why the term really cannot be defined or explained in my eyes. There are many forms of natural not just dealing with hair, but foods, bodies, plants, animals etc. Natural is a broad term that keeps evolving with time and will never clearly have a simple definition.

Works Cited :

http://www.cnn.com/2015/04/28/africa/5-ways-to-wear-natural-hair/

TOP 5 NATURAL HAIR EXTENSION AND WIG BRANDS

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Strong Subjects, Robust Verbs

Here is an opening paragraph that displays some common early draft traits that a good revision will eliminate. Too many sentences begin with, or contain “There is” or “there are” or “it is” components. Those phrases almost always result in weak subject choices and weaker verbs (is being the weakest verb.)

People are welcome to walk into the hospital when in need of care; however, not all will be treated equally because of the individual’s disadvantages or advantages. It’s not that doctors are biased towards the patients. It is very seldom that the first priority of the doctors is not the wellbeing of patients, yet why is there an unequal amount of treatment amongst people of different groups such as race, income, and social class? Through analyzing surveys taken by patients, there is no doubt health disparities are apparent in hospitals and the problem of that roots back to the patient’s privilege. One of the privileges of people with wealth is the ability to communicate more effectively; though communication between doctors and patients is often overlooked by people, it makes a huge influence on the doctor’s decisions and performance. Therefore, people with strong communication skills are usually able to get the most out of the doctor’s abilities.

1) People are welcomed to walk into the hospital when in need of care; however, not all will be treated equally because of the individual’s disadvantages or advantages.
—(Revised to place the emphasis on the disadvantage of having disadvantages. Makes “poor treatment” the subject of your sentence.)

If hospitals had entrances marked “Rich Patients” and “Poor Patients,” we would all object. But the truth is, once inside the hospital, poor patients receive less care, and suffer worse outcomes, than rich patients.

2) It’s not that doctors are bias towards the patients.
—(Revised to eliminate the weak “It is not” opening.” Identifies the particular patient group. Uses the powerful verb “discriminate.” Indicates that the discrimination is not deliberate.)

Doctors don’t knowingly discriminate against their poor patients.

3) It is very seldom that the first priority of the doctor’s is not the wellbeing of patients, yet why is there an unequal amount of treatment amongst people of different groups such as race, income, and social class?
—(Revised to eliminate several weak “It is ” phrases. Eliminates the weak rhetorical question. Replaces the neutral “unequal amount” with a clear distinction: some are shortchanged. )

But the best-intentioned doctors nevertheless shortchange some of their patients on the basis of race, income, and social class.

4) Through analyzing surveys taken by patients there is no doubt health disparities is apparent in hospitals and the problem of that roots back to the patient’s privileges.
—(Revised to eliminate the weak “there is” clause.” Makes a straightforward comparison claim to replace the neutral “disparities” root back to privilege.)

Patient surveys prove that hospitals lavish care on privileged patients that underprivileged patients do not enjoy.

5) One of the privileges of people with wealth is the ability to communicate more effectively; though communication between doctors and patients is often overlooked by people, it makes a huge influence on the doctor’s decisions and performance.
—(Revised to eliminate the weak “is” verbs and the weak “it” clause. Makes a straightforward claim with a robust verb.)

They do so, according to Massachusetts General, because well-to-do patients communicate better on average with their doctors.

6) Therefore, people with strong communication skills are usually able to get the most out of the doctor’s abilities.
—(Revised to improve the verb.)

And that enhanced ability to influence their own care drives better physician performance.

Revised Paragraph:

If hospitals had entrances marked “Rich Patients” and “Poor Patients,” we would all object. But the truth is, once inside the hospital, poor patients receive less care, and suffer worse outcomes, than rich patients. Doctors don’t knowingly discriminate against their poor patients. But the best-intentioned doctors nevertheless shortchange some of their patients on the basis of race, income, and social class. Patient surveys prove that hospitals lavish care on privileged patients that underprivileged patients do not enjoy. They do so, according to Massachusetts General, because well-to-do patients communicate better on average with their doctors. And that enhanced ability to influence their own care drives better physician performance.

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Causal Rewrite-Haveanelephantasticday

From a young age parents tell their children to keep an open mind and embrace different cultures. They teach us to be courteous and mindful of different backgrounds and traditions. Regardless of whether one agrees with a culture or not, norms tell us to be accepting  of it and what it bring to the world. A brand new culture has been introduced to society today. A culture that doesn’t rely on different food or a person’s origin. Rape culture is when society blames victims of sexual assault and normalize male sexual violence. In the midst in this craze based around social acceptance, the quality of cultures in being confused and people are so willing to accept a culture based around the exploitation of women. Children are growing up in a time where we are teaching young girls how to be extra careful and avoid rape instead of teaching boys not to be rapists.

When victims comes forward they are often brushed aside or condemned for being victims. Victims are shamed and their abusers go on living a normal life. When brought to face the justice system, rapists often roam free the very next day. Only 16% of rapists spend a night in jail. The victims may be severely traumatized by the event and their attackers are back on the streets. Due to the inconsistencies in the justice system rapists have no fear when it comes to punishment. Instead of being prosecuted, they are free to assault or abuse once again.

At Columbia University, Emma Sulkowicz was raped. Her rapist still goes to her school and roams campus freely along side of her and her peers. After reporting her assault she learned that two other young women reported that the same man raped and assaulted them in the past. However, the University found a way to dismiss each of the three cases. Students at the University filed a federal report saying that the “school is too lenient with alleged perpetrators and it discourages students from reporting assault.” So instead of being comfortable with reporting an assault, students feel uneasy. This encourages perpetrators to continue assaulting because there is no punishment for their actions.

 

 

Sources:

New source: http://time.com/98433/video-ivy-league-rape/

http://www.rccmsc.org/resources/get-the-facts.aspx

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A12: Rebuttal Rewrite

Rebuttal Rewrite

As you did before with your Definition and Causal Rewrites, you’ll be required to revise and re-post your Rebuttal Argument as a Rebuttal Rewrite. You’ll publish your new post in a new Category, A12: Rebuttal Rewrite.

If you haven’t yet asked for and received feedback on your Rebuttal Argument, and you want feedback, now is the time to ask. Time is short and I will probably not be able to be as thorough as usual, but I will respond to every request for feedback received by midnight tonight.

Leave your unimproved Rebuttal Argument behind in its original post and publish a new post for your Rewrite.

  • Your original Rebuttal Argument will be a permanent part of your Non-portfolio collection of assignments.
  • You can continue to improve your A12 right up until the day Portfolios are due, although feedback may be very limited, and you will not receive a specific grade for improvements you make. The final version, however, will contribute to your overall holistic Portfolio grade.

Works Cited
You’ll need to cite two sources for this Rewrite, which can be different from those you selected for your first posts for this Argument.

ASSIGNMENT SPECIFICS

  • Post this mandatory Rewrite of your Rebuttal Argument.
  • Make significant revisions to your first draft, posts, leaving the original behind to make comparisons easy.
  • Include Works Cited.
  • Title your post Rebuttal Rewrite—Username.
  • Publish your definition essay in the A12: Rebuttal Rewrite category and your own Username category.

GRADE DETAILS

  • Due before class FRI NOV 20.
  • Customary late penalties. (0-24 hours 10%) (24-48 hours 20%) (48+ hours, 0 grade)
  • Portfolio Essay
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Causal Rewrite -twofoursixohtwo

Coping Through Comedy

Childhood is emotionally scarring for everyone, to some degree. For every few that make it out alive and unscathed, there are more who suffered some trauma, wether it be neglect or abuse, creating a mound of insecurities to sort through as they aged. A need for validation and acceptance is born, leading many to act out and perform outrageous acts to be noticed and cared about. Those who manage to channel that energy into constructive activity as they reached adulthood have the potential to be successful, and one such category of people are comedians. Comedians, those who bring light to a dreary day but exploiting their own personal problems have a gift that is hard to replicate. This is because their talent for wit, satire, and observational comedy comes from a biological root, as the best comedians seem to suffer from various mental illnesses rooted in their insecurities. Mental illnesses are most commonly caused by a rough childhood or a traumatic event, as many may experience. Comedians are special, however, because they specifically tested higher than the average person for psychotic traits, which researchers speculate quintessential to create interesting material that is new and thought provoking, as these traits help comedians view the world in a more creative and intriguing way.

Although most, if not all comedians tested for high levels of these traits, that is almost where the similarities end, from a biological standpoint. Not every comedian is plagued by mental illness, but those that are potentially share the same disorder. While one would assume this would lead to similar thought patterns and ideas, in observing several comedian’s routines, we see that is not true. Cognitive functions vary for person to person, and past experiences will always influence how a person perceives and reacts to stimulus. As every person is unique in the world, the same rules apply to everyone’s work. No two people will produce the exact same work in any field, and the same is true for comedians. Coming from different backgrounds, each performer will create individual routines and bits based of of what they themselves have experienced and what is relevant to them. While one jokes about divorce and depression in one breath, another will take jabs at themselves for never getting a date in the first place due to social anxiety. Even performers who share the same struggles and situations have that creative worldview at their advantage and will never comment on a topic the exact same way, creating a plethora of interesting and hilarious choices and viewpoints.

In the wide spectrum of comedy, it’s difficult to determine where the line is draw between funny and not. There is a delicate balance that is difficult to maintain, as the extremes are either the routine is so safe it’s terribly boring, or so offensive and personal it is unwatchable. This fine line is tackled by Peter McGraw and Caleb Warren, who decided to delve into the world of comedy to explain why we find personal struggle of those we don’t know funny. They call their findings the “Benign Violation Theory of Comedy.” As stated in their research, “Benign violations in comedy are anything from bizarre and unusual social acts, to physical deformity, to physical threats, so there is a wide range of potential topics to address,” meaning there is an endless pool of potential material (McGraw & Warren, 2010). These acts are considered funny because they are outside the audience’s perception of how the world should be, threatening their paradigm. The comedy comes in when the offending circumstances, or violation, is made out to be harmless, or benign. The correlation in why we find struggle funny is boiled down to two variables: distance and severity. In their studies, they found that a small mishap, like a stubbed toe, is only funny when in close proximity as opposed to years in the past, while a serious tragedy is not funny when in close proximity, but as time goes on, it is able to be joked about, and can even be an emotional release for most, including the comedians themselves. Talking about stubbing a toe two years ago is boring, safe comedy while joking about a terrorist attack barely weeks after is insensitive, unbearable, and unwatchable comedy. There needs to be a balance between the two extremes to create a great routine.

While it can’t help a performer find this balance, Benign Violation Theory has helped researchers understand how comedy helps with stress, anxiety, and depression. When the threat of a potentially offensive or dangerous violation is diffused, it becomes benign which, in turn, gives an audience the opportunity to release their stress through laughter, guilt-free. A comedian owes a paying audience a good show, so it is common to see intimate struggle come up in a routine, because that is what the performer would know best. The violation here, in general terms, is that a private life becomes public. While these topics are traditionally taboo and not meant for crowds of hundreds or thousands, audiences are given the chance to release themselves from their own troubles. By the Benign Violation Theory, the private stories violation is made benign because comedians have to power and skill to bring devastating topic to light, wether it be about failed relationships, social anxieties, familial issues, illegal drugs, depression, or anxiety, and spin them in a way that provides catharsis, helping people let go and laugh at an otherwise miserable situation. The stress relief works both ways, for when the performer expresses their thoughts, opinions, and troubles to an audience, he or she is able to better cope with the issue, making it a little less sad.

Comedy is a tough business to get by in, and has driven many to the absolute edge, resulting in self-harm and even suicide. Mental illnesses can be enough to break down the strongest of people, and those who are willing to bear all, even use their issues to their own advantage, are a sight to behold. Comedians have a hard enough job, getting in front of hundreds or thousands of people and helping them forget their troubles. These talented performers are laughing along with us (not at us) and use their own routines and fans to potentially help themselves. It takes a trained, skilled eye to manipulate that fine line between safe and offensive comedy, and those that succeed do the world and themselves a great good, and reminds everyone that while some circumstances may seem like the end of the world, there is always a way back. As stated by McGraw & Warren (2010), “Laughter and amusement signal to the world that a violation is indeed okay.” We all need our daily laugh to keep us moving on in hopes of a better, brighter tomorrow.

Mcgraw, A. P., C. Warren, L. E. Williams, and B. Leonard. “Too Close for Comfort, or Too Far to Care? Finding Humor in Distant Tragedies and Close Mishaps.” Psychological Science (2012): 1215-223. Web. 3 Nov. 2015.

Mcgraw, A. P., and C. Warren. “Benign Violations: Making Immoral Behavior Funny.” Psychological Science (2010): 1141-149. Web. 3 Nov. 2015.

Khazan, Olga. “The Dark Psychology of Being a Good Comedian.” The Atlantic. Atlantic Media Company, 27 Feb. 2014. Web. 3 Nov. 2015.

(New Source) Snow, Shane. “A Quest to Understand What Makes Things Funny.” The New Yorker. Condé Nast, 1 Apr. 2014. Web. 18 Nov. 2015.

 

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Agenda WED NOV 18

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Absolutely Essential Grammar

We probably shouldn’t have to study grammar in College Composition II, but the fact is not everybody who gets this far into college is comfortable with grammar basics. We’ll review grammar basics in class only if necessary, but I will enforce strict standards for minimally correct writing in your Portfolios.

FAILS FOR GRAMMAR
Papers that violate these very basic rules will fail, at least temporarily, but you’ll have every opportunity to revise your work until your writing is error-free and worthy of a grade.

If your paper fails for basic grammar, I’ll refer you back to this post for advice on how to correct mistakes. I’ll add to this list of 13 basic rules if other errors show up in papers often enough to warrant a new rule.

Rule 1. There/Their/They’re
They’re has only one use. It’s a contraction for They are.
Example: They’re really tasty.
Their has only one use. It’s a possessive for Them.
Example: Their chips are really tasty.
There is used the rest of the time, as an adverb of place, or as a pronoun to introduce sentences.
Example: There are plenty of chips over there.

Rule 2. Its/It’s
It’s has only one use. It’s a contraction for It is.
Example: It’s a simple rule.
Its has only one use. It’s a possessive for It.
Example: Stand that baby on its head.

Rule 3. The reason is because
Because means for the reason that.
It’s repetitiously and repeatedly redundant to say that “the reason for something is because….”
Wrong: The reason he lost his license is because he got so many tickets for speeding and reckless driving.
Right: He lost his license because he got so many tickets for speeding and reckless driving.
Right: He lost his license by driving recklessly and speeding.

Rule 4A. Pronouns and Gender
It’s considered socially insensitive to automatically use male pronouns where a person’s gender is not known.
Socially insensitive: Be careful with your antecedents, or your reader will lose his place.

The common solution, of mixing a singular noun with a plural pronoun, however, is worse.
Grammatically incorrect: Be careful with your antecedents, or your reader will lose their place.

One correct but awkward solution is to alternate male and female pronouns in your writing.
Correct: Be careful with your antecedents, or your reader will lose her place.
Another solution is to stick with plurals.
Correct: Be careful with your antecedents, or your readers will lose their place.

Rule 4B: Pronouns and Number
Pronouns must agree in number with the nouns they represent. Singular nouns, like officer, cannot be represented by plural pronouns, like they.

Incorrect: It is unlikely that a police officer will admit that they used excessive force.
Correct but gender insensitive: It is unlikely that a police officer will admit that he used excessive force.
Correct but clumsy: It is unlikely that a police officer will admit that he or she used excessive force.
Correct: It is unlikely that police officers will admit that they used excessive force.
Correct because it eliminates the pronoun: Police officers rarely admit to using excessive force.

Incorrect: If the suspect suffers “great bodily harm,” they have the right to defend themselves.
Correct but gender insensitive: If the suspect suffers “great bodily harm,” he has the right to defend himself.
Correct but clumsy: If the suspect suffers “great bodily harm,” he or she has the right to defend himself or herself.
Correct: If the suspects suffer “great bodily harm,” they have the right to defend themselves.
Correct because it avoids the pronoun: Suspects who suffer  “great bodily harm” have the right to self-defense.

Rule 5. Count and Noncount Nouns
Use the word number, not the word amount, to refer to things that can be counted, like votes. Use the word amount, not the word number, to refer to things that cannot be counted, like voting. The easy way to determine whether the noun can be counted or not is to apply the word many or much.

How many votes? Votes can be counted. Therefore we talk about the number of votes.
Correct: Early registration increased the number of votes cast in the last election: two million votes.

How much voting? Voting cannot be counted. Therefore we talk about the amount of voting.
Correct: Early registration increased the amount of voting in the last election: much more than last year.

Use the word fewer, not the word less, to refer to things that can be counted, like votes. Use the word less, not the word fewer, to refer to things that cannot be counted, like voting. The easy way to determine whether the noun can be counted or not is to apply the word many or much.

How many votes?
Votes can be counted. Therefore we talk about more or fewer votes.
Correct: Fewer votes were cast this year than last year.

How much voting? Voting cannot be counted. Therefore we talk about more or less voting.
Correct: Less voting occurs in off-Presidential years than in Presidential-election years.

Rule 6. To/Too/Two
This one should be learned before high school.
Two has only one use. It’s a number.
Example: I’ll take two of those.
Too is a conjunction meaning and or in addition.
Example: I’d like one of those too.
Example: Too, I’d like one of those. (This use is rare.)
Too is also an adverb meaning excessive.
Example: Those kids are too cute.
To is used in every other case: to form infinitives, as a preposition to indicate place, or to mean roughly for the purpose.
Example: To get to London, to go to the concert, you’ll need to cross the bridge.

Rule 7. Periods and Commas Inside the Quotes
Always, always, always, always, always. Periods and commas always go inside the quotes.
Always: Election day is not just a “day,” but could really be called “election month.”
Never: Election day is not just a “day”, but could really be called “election month”.

Rule 8. Then/Than
Clear rules determine when these two words are used. They are in no way interchangeable.
Then: Used for time: Then we had ice cream; now we have ice cream soup.”
Then: Used for consequence, with if: “If it melts, then we’ll have soup.”
Than: Used for comparisons only, such as finer: “Nothing could be finer than to be in Carolina.”
Again, only with comparisons, such as all the other options: “Other than waiting, we had nothing to do.”

Rule 9. Affect/Effect
Affect (the verb) and Effect (the noun) are interchangeable about one time in a million. Forget about that one time; you’ll never need it. Instead, concentrate on the 999,999 times you’ll be correct by following this rule:
Affect: The cold does not affect me. Affect is a verb.
Effect: The cold has no effect on me. Effect is a noun.
Affect/Affectation: The cold does not affect me, but I pretend it does: it’s an affectation of mine. Affectation is the noun form of the verb affect. Effect has no “noun form” because it’s a noun!
(If you must know about that one time in a million, I’ll tell you, but I shouldn’t risk it: “To effect that change, we had to pull all his teeth.” The meaning of this use of effect is “to put it into effect.”)

Rule 10. Your/You’re
You’re has only one use. It’s a contraction for You are.
Example: You’re a fine writer.
Your has only one use. It’s a possessive adjective for You.
Example: Your writing is quite strong.

Rule 11. Single Quotes/Double Quotes
Other countries can do what they like, but in America, we use Double Quotes for everything!
Even if you’re just using quotes ironically, or for another special purpose, they’re always double, not single quotes.
Correct: McDonald’s “healthy menu” is meant as a joke.
Correct: The word “vague” shows up too often in my notes.

The only proper use of Single Quotes is inside Double Quotes.
Correct: “All our restaurants offer ‘healthy’ menu items,” said Ray Croc.

Rule 12. The Banned 2nd Person
Although it’s technically not bad grammar, writing 2nd-person sentences that address the reader as “you” is banned from academic writing.
Incorrect: You are far more likely to be pulled over for speeding if you are a teenager.
Correct: Teenagers are far more likely to be pulled over for speeding.

Rule 13. Plurals and Possessives
Writers who make mistake the plural for a possessive once will often do so repeatedly. An occasional typo won’t trigger a Fails for Grammar, but pervasive errors will.
Incorrect: America is the worlds most obese nation.
Correct: America is the world’s most obese nation.
Correct: Earth is fine but there may be other worlds we could occupy.

The rule is only slightly more complicated when a plural is formed without an “s.”
Incorrect: Democracy is every citizens responsibility.
Incorrect: Democracy is the peoples’ responsibility.
Correct: Democracy is the people’s responsibility and every citizen’s privilege.
Correct: Democracy is strong when all citizens’ rights are observed.

Rule 14. Subject/Verb Agreement
Subjects must agree in number with their verbs. Most writers match nouns and verbs without difficulty.

Correct: Hunger in developing countries harms everyone.
Correct: Hunger and disease in developing countries harm everyone.
Correct: Hunger or disease in developing countries harms everyone.

More problematic are singular pronouns that some writers believe to be plural.
Singular: Everybody, everyone, everything.
Singular: Anybody, anyone, anything.
Singular: Somebody, someone, something.
Singular: Nobody, No one, Nothing.

Plural: All

 

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Causal Rewrite – xChuki

Wooden shields

When presidential corruption surpasses all the limits and the entire nation suffers because of unfair one-sided laws and low salaries, every next decision made by the president can be turned into provocation against the society and cause big revolutionary movement. Viktor Yanukovich,  became a president of Ukraine in 2010 and since that moment he  has done everything to enrich himself, while every average person had to struggle because of new laws and fees.

Yanukovich had a questionable reputation way before his first appearance on the presidential election in 2005.  At his young age he was convicted twice for the theft and the infliction of bodily harm. These facts didn’t stay unnoticed by the journalists, and shortly it became generally known. Regardless of the negative attitude to Yanukovich, he managed to win the election with a small lead. It caused a national indignation and Orange Revolution because people believed that it was an obvious cheating. The Supreme Court agreed to hold the third round of the election, which Yanukovich lost to his opponent Viktor Ushchenko.

However, once it was time for new election 4 years later, Yanukovich took the presidential seat without resistance. It became possible for him, because the high expectations of the people that were supporting Ushchenko did not turn into reality, and there was no new promising candidate, so many of them were just generally tired and disappointed. Once Yanukovich became a president he cleared his criminal history with the help of a court hearing, which recognized his convictions illegal.

For the next few years, bit by bit, he was taking advantage of his position by enriching himself in every possible way. For example, almost every month his security cortege would get brand new models of Mercedes vehicles. While hundreds thousands of dollars were spent just on the presidential transportation, all the previous models would always mysteriously disappear. By the year 2012 Yanukovich ranked 4th in the world on the list of  “presidential expenses – average income” statistics.

When the president of Ukraine failed to sign the agreements with the European Union on November 29, students’ response was immediate – via social media, they decided to meet in the center of the city, on the Independence Square and stay for as long as necessary for the president to change his mind. Although almost everyone in the country was mad and disappointed, the situation wasn’t anywhere close to critical or unexpected, so just young adults were willing to fight for changes, while most of elderly people, and middle-aged adults weren’t motivated enough to make any actual moves against the government.

By the morning, around 500 harmless unarmed students that were still standing near the Independence Monument were attacked. Special police forces “Berkut”without any warnings  started beating up everyone with batons, and drag whoever they could catch to the police cars. Upon waking up and reading the news, people were shocked. The nation could no longer deal with presidential inhumanity and lawlessness. The night incident galvanized the country, a result the president was not expecting. Thousands of people of all ages, started gathering together in the central squares asking for justice. For the next 2 months revolutionaries occupied the center of the city,  demanding drastic changes in the government and laws, while well-paid special forces were trying to disorganize and weaken the revolution.

By the end of February it became already clear for everyone that there was no way back. After spending almost 3 months in the cold, fighting against the dictatorship, surviving in cold winter with almost no shelter and just support by other people from all over the country protesters could no longer  afford giving up. The president and his associates realized that their crimes were not unnoticed anymore, but Yanukovich after years of spoiling himself wasn’t willing to give up on his power and treasures. He started enacting new ridiculous and dictatorial laws. For example, using helmets became illegal, punishable by  jail without a court hearing. Because many people in the “Occupy” camp were using helmets, almost all the time, they automatically became criminals.

On February 18th the president implemented a law that would allow police use a real weapons against the protesters. All the special police forces were sent to the center of the city and were commanded to regain control of the Independence Square and all the adjacent streets.  The assaults on the revolution camp were continuously happening for 3 days in a row, trying to exhaust already tired people and take the control over the situation by force. However, as soon as people got notifications about the latest news from Maydan, many left their job places, and rushed to the center of the capital to join the revolutionary forces. Police were trying to scare people away  by pouring icy water on them, while professional snipers were injuring some of the most active protesters.

On February 22nd, policemen realized that no matter what they do, they just met higher resistance every hour. They started backing up while snipers were trying to shoot dead as many people as they could. Protesters with wooden shields, doctors with no body armor would get killed or injured while they were trying to just get bodies of the people that still could be saved.  After policemen ran away, the country found out that president was no longer at his residence, and a few weeks after running away, he announced his presence far away in Russia.

Works Cited

  1. History of EuromaidanInsider. Web. 18 November 2015
  2. History of Euromaidan: from the peaceful protests to bloody shootingiPress.ua.21 November 2014. Web. 18 November 2015
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casual rewrite-hiralp365

One of the most addicted drug heroin targets many innocent  peoples live. A city called Vancouver in Canada has high percentages of the drug abusers, that the government had came up with idea of  opening Insite facility. These facility ran by medical practitioners allow any drug addict to walk in and shoot heroin legally for free. This is referred as harm  reduction program but  it really doesn’t do any good than  does harm. The use of heroine by patients must be eliminated to prevent further harm to patients health and help in keeping moral ethics.

First of all, having Insite open will cause people to distrust rehab facility and give into Insite facilities. About 5000 of the people re intravenous drug users in which most of them are far less addicted. Insite center encourages addict to get more of the drug and nor completely to go clean by stopping the use if this very harmful drug. The government funds about 3 million dollars towards Insite center in providing with sterilized equipment and much more. If the government uses this funds to find safer treatment  or find alternative to this problem then it would save lives and stop the harm. People won’t come back over and over again in hopes for more heroin.

Having such a treatment method it will only cause detrimental affect on the patients health. In 2013, 308 people died in British Columbia due to illicit drug overdoses. Overall the main reason behind buildup of Insite program was to prevent suicide or crimes in the city. But is it really much simple as it appear? People and kids on the street feel very unsafe with drug addicts around. As more people go to Insite clinics, the more networking of drug dealers will take place. This can be a way for drug addicts ti get drugs from each other and then disturb people in the community

workcited

http://www.theglobeandmail.com/news/british-columbia/the-arguments-for-and-against-vancouvers-supervised-injection-site/article596153/

http://themetropolitain.ca/articles/view/229

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Communications and Patient’s Care

To observe the performance of doctors in hospitals, often times patients are given surveys to rate how their treatment was. Shockingly, results shown that families with lower income generally have poorer performances. Some assumptions came up by people claiming that perhaps some doctors are biased to their patients and perform better for the richer people; however, that thought was discarded because there is no way of telling which doctors have that mindset. In addition, majority of the patients are changed into hospital gowns, which may make it harder to distinguish between rich and poor patients.  Therefore, to dig deeper into finding out why does poor patients do not get the same care from doctors, the Massachusetts General Hospital in Boston raises the possibility, “do patients of higher socioeconomic status simply have an easier time communicating with doctors, and hence are more satisfied with their care than less-well-off people?”

Communication between the physicians and the patient play a huge part because with that communication, it helps the doctors make decisions and  figure out how to help the patient. According to American Academy of Orthopaedic Surgeons, the benefits of effective communication is that “the patient and physician have developed a ‘partnership’ and the patient has been fully educated in the nature of his or her condition and the different methods to address the problem.” By forming this partnership, patients will have more of a say of what they want, which has shown more satisfactory. Studies by the American Academy of Orthopaedic Surgeons show that a more effective partnerships include doctors who are good listeners and the patient’s communication skills. Furthermore, with good communication between the doctors and patients, it will be made clear between the doctors and patients what to expect, the goals, and what is going on in the processes of the care.

Since communication has a huge influence on how well the doctors perform and how satisfied the patients are, it is a possible answer to why people from poorer backgrounds give lower ratings for doctors because there may be a gap between the patient and doctor. Gaps like a language barrier, lack of health literacy, and lack of communication skills are things that are common in people living in the lower social class and may cause difficulty for understanding between patients and doctors.

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