Category Archives: Feedback Please

A Creative Piece

Although it’s not the type you were expecting, I wanted to show you one of my writings I did for a class this year about Shakespeare’s A Midsummer Night’s Dream. It’s short, sweet and a little childish, but I thought … Continue reading

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Research- strawberryfields4

Watch Out for the Food Police The multi-billion dollar diet industry shows no mercy while hunting its prey—impressionable consumers of all ages. Major corporations responsible for the manufacturing of diet foods and weight loss products viscously capitalize on the glorified … Continue reading

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Research – Frogs02

Obesity Ruins The World The term “obesity” is overly misrepresented by society. The usual thought whenhearing obesity is overweight. What is not recognized is the health problems that followobesity. Obesity can cause heart problems and can lead to cancer and … Continue reading

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*Rebuttal Rewrite- friendoftacos

How Arguments Against Abortion are Flawed The argument about abortion is very complicated.  Abortion is hotly debated on both sides of the debate. It is difficult to discuss abortion with most people since it is a delicate issue. Abortion is a topic on which the majority of people already have an opinion. If you are pro-life or pro-choice, you are making a major political declaration. There doesn’t appear to be much common ground between the opposing views on abortion. Having a human being developing inside one’s body is a life-changing experience for a woman. Pregnancy is a life-altering experience. When a woman decides to terminate her pregnancy, she is making a difficult choice. It’s not something to take lightly when you find out you’re pregnant against your will. The reasons why a woman chooses to avoid becoming pregnant are numerous and valid. Pro-lifers believe that women who choose to terminate their pregnancies have no valid grounds for doing so. One legitimate reason a woman can decide to terminate her pregnancy is because she does not want to carry the child any longer. When a woman has an unwanted pregnancy, she must choose whether she is going to carry the baby to full term or choose to end the pregnancy. … Continue reading

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Rebuttal Rewrite—King of Camp

Ambiguity is Absolute             Female virginity is anything but a singular definition. Men in power have and continue to confine female virginity to a woman who has never had penetrative vaginal sexual intercourse. Because men hold the uppermost power in … Continue reading

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Visual Rewrite – Kilotoon

0:00 – 0:03 The first shot of the video displays two warriors riding horseback. The scenery seems as if it were taken right in the wild west. In the back there are trees, both dead and alive, along with a … Continue reading

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Visual Rewrite-toastedflatbread

0:00-The video opens with a wide view of an older-looking living room. Two girls are sitting on opposite ends of a dark tan couch. The one on the left has long curly brown hair and the one on the right … Continue reading

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Definition Rewrite – comatosefox

Reading Lacrosse’s Terms and Conditions “The Creator’s Game,” natively known as Baggataway or stickball, is now known as lacrosse. Originally designed by the natives across North America it was slowly adapted throughout the centuries leading to the lacrosse we know … Continue reading

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Stone Money—comatosefox

We Never Grew Up It is hard to think that all the money you own in your bank accounts and all the physical paper bills and metal disks we pass around, do not exist. We have created a physical object … Continue reading

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Stone Money-zzbrd2822

It’s Real, As Long as We Believe If I pose the question, “What is money?”, what comes to mind? Normally, you would state what has been dictated as the obvious, such as dollar bills or coins. Growing up we were … Continue reading

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