12 THU FEB 23

Class 12 THU FEB 23

Life Choices

Life Choices

Mandatory Conference 2

A reminder. Your 2nd Mandatory Professor Conference, “Evaluate Your Thesis Progress” was to have been completed by today, THU FEB 23.” If you haven’t had a conference, follow the link to the Conference Chart and set one up. Make a note of this in your Agenda Notes for today so I know you’ve seen it.

Reminder, to receive full credit for the assignment, if you HAVE had your second conference, return to the Mandatory Conferences Chart to update your Agenda section with a brief review of the session.

Update: “Protected Class

Writing Mechanics

Good Citation Mechanics

Lecture

The Bobblehead Strategy

EinsteinBobble

Claims Work

The sales pitch version of the LASIK story designed to be soothing while acknowledging the slightly barbaric-looking process of carving a flap into a patient’s cornea.

Below, though, is the hilarious result of grabbing whatever graphic is available for inclusion in your sales material, taken last semester from a legitimate eyecare practice in Australia.

The Australian practice finally removed this graphic from their website after I and several students made appointments for surgical consults in several Australian cities and mentioned, in our requests, that we were interested in being their “victims.”

But it’s still being used by the India MediTourism website.

And by a Discount website in Sydney, where your healthy virgin corneal wall can be given “irreversible damage” for 67% OFF (about $6.80 with free delivery!)

Our actual class work

  • Link to the Lasik Surgery Claims Demonstration
    • A lecture on claims that includes a chart for applying several claims types to your own hypothesis.

Aristotle: Logos Ethos Pathos

Link to completed chart

45 Responses to 12 THU FEB 23

  1. davidbdale says:

    Excellent observations that you have phrased as instructions:

    —tailor the claim to people who may dispute it
    —The point of our writing is to be the calm voice in the room that gets people to understand the argument and find a place to agree on it
    —Write for the person who wants to learn something new about your topic, not for everybody

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  2. davidbdale says:

    Thank you for this, Minutemen. I was expecting to see it below the “Political Paralysis” argument, but it’s fine that it’s here.

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  3. davidbdale says:

    Unintentionally my ass. 🙂
    This is really strong:

    A reader who already completely agrees with your claims is not really worth talking to because they can’t be persuaded if they are on your side. The people who automatically disagree with you and don’t seem like they’re going to change their minds are not the target audience either. The best audience is the margin of people who are logical and open minded enough to have their opinions changed by strong claims with good evidence.

    And the paragraph that follows is the best kind of Note-taking, where you use the space to remind yourself what you’ve learned TO DO with the subject matter. This is a performance course. Information is fine, but process is king.
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  4. davidbdale says:

    Covers the essentials.
    3/3

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  5. davidbdale says:

    Good to hear!
    3/3

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  6. davidbdale says:

    There are undoubtedly dozens of claims types.
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  7. davidbdale says:

    Nice blend of information and prescription.
    4/3

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  8. davidbdale says:

    If these work for you.
    3/3

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  9. davidbdale says:

    Couldn’t resist the entertainment value of the anti-lasik graphic.
    3/3

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  10. clevelandbrown03 says:

    Seatle becomes the first country to get rid of caste.
    A caste is “a system is a form of social stratification that involves a system of hierarchically ranked, closed endogamous strata, the membership of which is ascribed and between which contact is restricted and mobility theoretically impossible.”

    What you say in a comma can be deleted and the sentence will still make sense

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  11. rowanluver29 says:

    – In the start of the class, we had to decide on two things to keep in our life out of four. I chose love and money.
    – We discussed an article titled “Seattle becomes the first city in the US to ban caste discrimination.” This article circled back to what we talked about in Tuesday’s class about different categories of people, what they stand for and how society treats them. Tuesday’s class was about gay marriage and todays related to castes. Seattle is the first to ban caste discrimination.
    – We watched a CNN video about the castes in India that showed us how much those specific lower classes need to be protected. An example would the upper class easily being able to rape women of the lower class with zero consequence.
    – For a good citation, be sure to include the author, title, name of the publication, a quotation or paraphrase, have said language (i.e., believes, insists, claims)
    – Quotations before and after two statements saying the same thing, can be considered parenthesis. “My dog, Shelby, loves hot dogs.”
    – A semicolon can be considered an equal sign because the statements before and after are considered equal.

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  12. queenrandom04 says:

    We got a reminder to set up our mandatory conference if we hadn’t done it yet. We learned about the caste system that’s deeply ingrained in India’s culture. ‘The Untouchables ‘ is the lowest class that can’t leave their neighborhood and have basically no rights. Seattle has had a migration of an Indian population so much so that they have had to pass a law to make the same caste system’s discrimination illegal there. We spent the next portion of class learning how to properly cite quotes within essays. Our next lesson was to help us figure out the best way to convince people of agreeing to our claims. Starting with small steps that slowly convince them to be less resistant to your most controversial claim.

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  13. tristanb50 says:

    -Seattle recently banned caste discrimination, as a result of disputes between many of the South Asian immigrants that migrate to the tech hub
    -The lowest class is named “the untouchables”, an ancient class people are born into with no upward mobility
    Good Citations:
    -Identify the author and the title, possibly the name of the publication
    -Could include faithful paraphrasing instead of direct quotes
    -Uses said language (ex: said, believes, claims, asserts, etc.)
    -Avoid using a comma to build the quote into the sentence
    -Pronouns can be put before the proper noun
    -Colon can be used like an equals sign
    -Following the word “that,” the quote doesn’t have to be capitalized
    Examples:
    Author, in “Title, said that “quote.”

    Bobblehead Strategy:
    -State smaller propositions to work up to your claim
    -Establishes yourself on the base page as the reader, establish common goals

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  14. -We did an activity where we had to choose between love, service, money, and fame, and we were only to select two for the rest of our lives.
    -Seattle banned caste discrimination for the first time. Basically, caste is a class system used for a long time where people were born into a class depending on race or sex, and they are stuck there for the rest of their lives. Seattle made the move to ban this kind of discrimination so that lower class individuals can work their way up to upper class.
    -In India, the upper class and lower class live in separate homes that are really different. Upper class have nice homes while the lower class have not so nice homes. Yet, there is no wall or barrier blocking them off. They just know not to cross over to the other side.
    -We learned some more citation techniques that make the sentences look and sound better such as using a colon to make a claim.

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  15. rowanstudent6 says:

    -Life choices are difficult and complicated because they require an understanding of the consequences of every outcome.
    -Protected classes must be protected because sometimes they don’t know they’re swimming in water which means they don’t know that they need to be protected. We see this in the caste system in India and Seattle as it is so ingrained in some that they are “untouchable” that they don’t realize they are same as everyone else.
    -Therapy should be mandated as it should be treated as any other disease. You want to add to your argument by stating things that the reader cannot be disputed that also help your claims.

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  16. Water says:

    Seattle becomes the first state to ban caste discrimination, this is important since most of the population had been in the caste category, and to be born into a caste is a wealth class where you are considered an untouchable, lowest of the social class and can’t leave escape it. Now that caste discrimination has been banned, those suffering from prejudice can be comfortable despite their status, especially in a city with a high population. Apposites are like big commas, in the professor’s example, ” My dog, Shelby, loves hot dogs ” is the same thing as ” My dog (Shelby) loves hot dogs “. when writing you should have in mind the bobblehead strategy which is that you must have the reader always nodding their head.

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  17. Fulcrum66 says:

    For the beginning of class we conduct an activity where we pick two options from four categories and you must choose carefully. After our discussion about Gay marriage last class a recent story was brought up in the news was Seattle being the first city in the US to ban caste discrimination. With an increase in numbers of immigrants following the caste system, the system has become a growing problem and this ban will only help these people. Following this we go over how to properly format citations with identifying the author, title of the source, and possibly the publication. We go over the bobble head strategy by leading your readers to a conclusion of a big YES to something you are asking.

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  18. music0392 says:

    At the beginning of class, we looked at an image containing 4 choices, Love, Money, Fame, and Service, and we had to choose 2 and exclude the rest. I decided I would choose Service and Fame, as I would like to be a well known household name for some reason, and I would be known as a kind giving person as well. It would be hard without love and money but I think the others are a good substitute for them.
    (I signed up for 12:30 on Friday for the second mandatory conference.)
    We next looked at an article and video about the caste system in India, and how caste discrimination was banned in Seattle. The caste system is very discriminatory against the untouchable class, especially to younger women, and it’s hard to believe that such a system still exists in today’s world.
    We also went over good examples of citations, which identify the author, the title of the source, a quotation or paraphrase, and state that they have SAID or CLAIMED. We can modify the punctuation of the quote according to your sentence, like changing an uppercase letter at the start of a quote to a lowercase if you begin with “claims that” for example. We should also add commas before and after the title of your article, because if you were to take away the title from the sentence, it would still make sense.
    Daniel Flath, in his essay, “Boylan’s Folly,” claims that…
    Daniel Flath, claims that…
    The title is not needed for the sentence to make sense, but it is added for more context. You can also use a colon, as a colon says that the claim on the left of it are equal to the claim on the right.
    Daniel Flath makes an outrageous claim: “Boys can’t learn from women.”
    We looked at 3 different citations and had to fix them using the proper rules about citations.
    We looked at the Bobblehead Strategy, which is when you prep your question with different claims that would get people nodding in agreement. Instead of asking your dad “can I have a new car?” you would begin by saying that it would be safer for me to have a newer model.
    Your essay does not have to state how your claim is met, but why it should be met.

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  19. Senpai Pio says:

    Notes:
    -Caste are groups in Hindu countries that one is born into.
    -Include citation information in the sentence. Identify the author, title of piece, may identify the publisher.
    -Use paraphrasing when the author is not straight to the point.
    -If the author says what you need in a sentence, use that.
    -Colons can be used as equal signs
    -Grammar is hard haha
    -Be careful with punctuation. Do not capitalize the first letter if you say says that”…”. Only if you says says,”…”

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  20. saycheese03 says:

    Beginning class- choose two options and exclude the others love, money, service, and fame – choose carefully a very hard decision to make since all of those are very important parts of life.

    Seattle first city in us to ban caste discrimination- castes are basically social classes that babies are born into. Everyone understands the cultural differences

    Good Mechanics- Include citation information in sentences and grammar ex: identify author, title, possible publication, paraphrase instead without quotation, and use said language

    Bobblehead strategy- get the audience to unwittingly start nodding then they will start to agree with you. This will help you persuade others to agree with the argument. Break proposals down to get yeses easily. Prep the audience for bigger goals by making them agree with the warrants.

    Lasik-very dangerous or seems very brutal. the sales technique sounds the opposite of what you would want to hear. They called the people getting the surgery victims.

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  21. sinatraman17 says:

    Castes: Indian Hindu immigrant groups of the lowest people on the discriminatory scale, which can not escape. They are born into this power dynamic, devoid of all hope. I’m reminded of a favorite quote – “We’re forced to believe the world we’re born into.”

    Citations: We employ informal in-text citations. Instead of parentheticals use something like “In the article _______ from _______, _____ writes…” Also, don’t be afraid to PARAPHRASE if the author’s language doesn’t suffice.

    (BIG COMMAS) = , little commas,

    **: is =** In “Title,” Author claims: “Quote.”

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  22. pinkmonkey32 says:

    -Started class off by picking 2 out of 4 choices, if you choose 2 you completely cut the other 2 out of your life, your choices are between Fame, Money, Love, and Service (go to Agenda 23 and click the life choices link and leave your reply on the post)
    -Mandatory Conferences- You should have had your mandatory conference by February 23, if not you should schedule to make it up.
    -** Update on Protected Class- Seattle is the first city to pass a law saying you can’t discriminate by cast ( This article provided on agenda 23 showed the cast system in India that people truly believe they are less then just because they were born on the other side of the village.) Unfortunately we cant help India but I find it exciting that we are trying to stop it here.
    -Citation Mechanics- By clicking the Citation Mechanics link you will be taken to a page of citation examples showing you how to properly citate (Example: Daniel Flath, in his essay, “Boylan’s Folly,” claims that “boys can’t learn from women.”) After reading through complete the 4 activity sentences in the reply box below
    -Bobble head Theory- You should ask a question that undeniably people will say yes and get them in the habit of saying yes so while they read your essay, they agree on accident by default. If you continue to state things people can agree with then when you lead up to your big claim its doesn’t seem as big and they are more inclined to say yes
    -Did not get to the rest of the Agenda page

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  23. gracchusbabeuf says:

    Class today began with a “life choices” section. It asked the class to choose two of love, fame, money, and service, with the stipulation that you can’t ask for money so you can do good. Essentially, no wishing for more wishes.

    From the headlines: Seattle is the first city in the US to ban caste discrimination. Seattle city councilwoman Kshama Sawant of the SA advocated for the rule which now makes caste-based discrimination explicitly illegal. As the south asian population of the city increased, so too did the instances of caste discrimination — an import from the old world.

    Next, we looked at the mechanics of citation, specifically when one should use a direct quote or paraphrasing. We then covered the many different configurations which apropriately attribute and introduce the author being quoted. We finished the section with an exercise in rewriting incorrect ciations.

    The next portion of the lecture covered the “bobblehead” strategy. To prosecute this strategy, the user asks a series of innocuous and inoffensive questions which condition the audience to agree and “buy-in” to the authors claims. Then, after sufficient unobjectionable claims have been agreed to, the (potentially) objectionable claim is presented.

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  24. philsfan1133 says:

    -The process of making decisions that shape one’s life trajectory is a challenging and intricate task, necessitating a comprehensive comprehension of the ramification of each potential outcome.
    -The imperative to safeguard certain classes of individuals arises from their possible lack of recognition of their marginalized status, as evidenced in instances such as the caste system in India and Seattle, where being deemed “untouchable” has become so deeply entrenched that individuals fail to perceive their inherent equality with others.
    -The prescription of therapy as a necessary treatment is analogous to the treatment of any physical ailment and should be mandated as such. This assertion is bolstered by indisputable evidence attesting to the effectiveness of therapy in improving mental health and enhancing overall well-being.
    -Grammar is hard, even when you think you’re right you are not

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  25. Shazammm says:

    Second mandatory conferences are approaching. You have a mandatory conference tomorrow with Professor Hodges at 1 PM. Be sure to update your agenda section with a brief review of the session after your conference to receive credit for the assignment.

    Protected class: On Thurs., Feb. 23, CNN’s Harmeet Kaur published an article called “Seattle becomes the first city in the US to ban caste discrimination.” Caste is when someone or a group of people cannot escape their “hereditary” environment. You cannot escape caste by moving, nor can you do anything about it. People are unable to obtain jobs because hirers still believe in caste.

    Caste is particularly prevalent in India. In India’s Haryana, the lower class and upper class are separated. The lower class, especially women in this class, are seen as “untouchables.” They cannot fight back. India banned caste decades ago, but it is still rooted in the system. Women in the lower class believe that they deserve this ill treatment because of their “karma.” It is a Hindu belief.

    Good citation mechanics: This has to do with good citation technique. They should identify the author, the title of the work, contain a quotation, and have said language {“said,” “believes,” “claims,” “asserts,” etc.}. Ex. “Sarena Compos said, “That is not interesting.” Look at examples on the “Good Citation Mechanics” page when citing your work in your essays. This is basically a lecture about punctuation.

    We avoid “mob mentality” reactions of those opposed to our big proposals by getting our audience to agree to smaller propositions. We make our smaller points more reasonable and agreeable, per se.

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  26. pinkheart84 says:

    Life choices: Pick 2 out of the 4 choices, if you choose 2 you completely cut the other two out of your life. You choose between Fame, Money, Love, and Service. We left replies on what we chose and why. I chose money and love.
    Caste: American’s use to disrespect other cultures. Caste is not permissible under the law. Caste is a class in which you are born and cannot escape. No one is responsible for what they are born into.
    Good citation mechanics: identify the author, title, contain quotation, said language. Direct quotes don’t have to begin with a capital letter.
    Bobblehead strategy: You can start with an outrageous claim, what you don’t want in your opening statement is a “no”. Make claims that are hard to hear but aren’t so specific that they make a quick yes or no. You don’t want the reader not to read sentence number 2.
    Mandatory Conferences: Students should already have had their mandatory conferences. Today is the last day. February 23. If you have not had a second meeting, you need to make it up.

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  27. mellowtacos says:

    LIFE CHOICE
    pick two; love, fame, money, service
    There’s no loopholes

    WHAT WOULD YOU PICK?
    I would pick money and love because fame is unnecessary to me and gives me nothing without money. I wouldn’t pick service because how am I supposed to give service without money? The only logical choice is money and love.

    MEETING
    make sure to attend and to update the chart after the meeting on what was discussed

    DISCUSSED CASTE DISCRIMINATION
    caste: a class in which you are born into that you can not escape
    Example: if you are born untouchable you remain untouchable for the rest of your life. Status is determined by birth
    Seattle decided to make caste illegal
    Even though it’s been made illegal some people still believe it.
    Women in some communities in India are seen as property of the upperclassman men

    GOOD CITATION
    They all identify the author and title
    They could contain the name of the publication
    They contain quotations
    They could contain a paraphrase instead

    *if you can hear the difference you should see the difference

    Example:
    Serena Compos said, “that is not interesting.”
    Serena Compos said that Professor Hodges is “not interesting.”

    *colons are equal signs

    MAKE ONE OF YOUR OWN
    Daniel Flath, the author of “Boylan’s Folly”, says, “Boys can’t learn from women.”

    BOBBLE HEAD STRATEGY
    “Dad can I have a new car?” Is a good way to get a quick no

    Don’t ask question that can be answered with a quick no

    First sentence
    You can make an outrageous statement as long as it gets them to read the next sentence

    “Dad, do you want me to come home safe?” Is a much better strategy

    The trick of this strategy is to get the reader to make a bunch of little yes’s

    *avoid mob mentality in your big proposal by getting the audience to agree to smaller propositions that don’t raise those big objections

    Example:
    Therapy should be AVAILABLE for every youth who DESIRES it.

    next step: we can help our audience recognize how easily they agree to the general proposal for all but a VERY FEW individuals.

    *Slowly work to that big blunt statement

    **To be continued on Tuesday**

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  28. tlap23 says:

    -Life Choices→ Exclusion of others
    -Money, Fame, Service, Love but can only have two and the excluded two do not
    result from the ones you picked
    Mandatory conferences due today and tomorrow
    -After conference be sure to fill out a short reflection under your conference time for full credit
    -Caste- Class from which you are born into and cannot escape
    -Example: Lower middle class→ Stuck for life no matter how much money you make
    -Good Citation Mechanics:
    -Essentials of good citation include:
    -Identifying the author
    -Identifying the title of the article or story
    -Contain a quote (could contain a paraphrase instead)
    -Have SAID Language ( Said, believes, claims, asserts, insists)
    -Bobblehead Strategy→ Have someone nod in agreement to small proposal claims until it leads to the main question
    -Ex: Can I have a new car? A better way to ask would be Do you want me to get home safe?

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  29. doglover846 says:

    – Life Choices: You could only choose two out of money, love, service and fame. You can’t have all four nor pick one and assume that the other will come.
    – Caste: it is a class where you are born into and can not escape.
    – If you were born in a lower class you were not allowed to cross over to the upper class or else they are not protected.
    – Seattle haș become the first city in the US to ban caste discrimination
    – Seattle can’t stop it but they can make it illegal
    – Identify the Author, Title, then contain a quotation (could contain a paraphrase), contain the word like said, believes, or claims. Make sure you use a period at the end of the quote before the quotation if the sentence is done.
    – Ask questions that you keeps your audience head nodding.

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  30. mellowtacos says:

    LIFE CHOICE
    pick two; love, fame, money, service
    There’s no loopholes

    WHAT WOULD YOU PICK?
    I would pick money and love because fame is unnecessary to me and gives me nothing without money. I wouldn’t pick service because how am I supposed to give service without money? The only logical choice is money and love.

    MEETING
    make sure to attend and to update the chart after the meeting on what was discussed

    DISCUSSED CASTE DISCRIMINATION
    caste: a class in which you are born into that you can not escape
    Example: if you are born untouchable you remain untouchable for the rest of your life. Status is determined by birth
    Seattle decided to make caste illegal
    Even though it’s been made illegal some people still believe it.
    Women in some communities in India are seen as property of the upperclassman men

    GOOD CITATION
    They all identify the author and title
    They could contain the name of the publication
    They contain quotations
    They could contain a paraphrase instead

    *if you can hear the difference you should see the difference

    Example:
    Serena Compos said, “that is not interesting.”
    Serena Compos said that Professor Hodges is “not interesting.”

    *colons are equal signs

    MAKE ONE OF YOUR OWN
    Daniel Flath, the author of “Boylan’s Folly”, says, “Boys can’t learn from women.”

    BOBBLE HEAD STRATEGY
    “Dad can I have a new car?” Is a good way to get a quick no

    Don’t ask question that can be answered with a quick no

    First sentence
    You can make an outrageous statement as long as it gets them to read the next sentence

    “Dad, do you want me to come home safe?” Is a much better strategy

    The trick of this strategy is to get the reader to make a bunch of little yes’s

    *avoid mob mentality in your big proposal by getting the audience to agree to smaller propositions that don’t raise those big objections

    Example:
    Therapy should be AVAILABLE for every youth who DESIRES it.

    next step: we can help our audience recognize how easily they agree to the general proposal for all but a VERY FEW individuals.

    *Slowly work to that big blunt statement

    **To be continued on Tuesday*

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  31. fatjoe000 says:

    -Make a conference appointment
    -Caste is a “class” that you are born into that you can not escape
    -Use “Good Citations Mechanics” if I need help with citations
    -When you say the same thing twice you use commas
    ^My dog, Monty, likes hot dogs
    -Colons are the same as equal signs, it means the left is the same as the right
    -What you don’t want in your opening statement is a know
    -Don’t ask questions in your opening claims
    -The Bobblehead strategy is to get your audience to unwittingly start nodding in agreement to your claims
    -Avoid the “mob mentality” by getting the audience to agree to smaller propositions and don’t raise the big objections

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  32. sunflower0311 says:

    Agenda Notes
    – The caste system in other countries is somewhat similar to our class system (ex. upper, middle, lower) except that you cannot change castes no matter what you do. You are stuck in whatever caste you are born in.
    – Seattle banned caste discrimination

    Citation Notes
    – Several essentials of good citation
    – Identify the author
    – identify the title
    – they contain quotation (Could contain paraphrase instead without quotation marks)
    – They have said language (Said, believes, claims…)
    – Colons are little equal signs (:)

    Bobblehead Strategy
    – When making a claim or argument you do not want the reader to immediately say no and stop reading
    – The trick to the bobblehead strategy is to get your audience to start nodding in agreement
    – Start with small propositions that are more likely to get yeses before you put your big proposal out there.

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  33. cherries267 says:

    We had to pick two options between love, money, fame, and service and our thought process why.

    Scheduling our second conferences.

    Seattle just became the first city in the US to ban caste discrimination.

    Listening to how horrible the people in India are being treated because of this caste system.

    Going over how to use good citation mechanics.

    You can’t start an argument with an outrageous statement because it will be an immediate no. The goal is to get the audience to the next sentence and with doing that you have to ease them into a topic.

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  34. Life choices:
    You have to choose two out of four, but you cannot undo your choice. Choose between Money, Love, Fame, and Service
    You can choose two but one does not lead to another, you renounce the other.

    Caste – a category that you have been born into that you cannot change or escape
    Caste discrimination is now banned in Seattle!
    They realized that they can’t stop it, but they can make it illegal

    Essentials of a good citation:
    -author
    -title
    -quotation
    – paraphrase
    -said language
    – said, believes, claims, asserts, insists, etc…

    You can only quote the exact words that they say, you cannot change any words or names into pronouns or vise verse.

    When you say the same thing twice, you either put it in parentheses or in between two commas. For example:
    My dog, Monty, likes hot dogs.
    You can say: my dog likes hot dogs
    Or: Monty likes hot dogs
    “My dog” and “Monty” are the same thing so it has to be in commas or parentheses

    Get your audience to give little nods… in agreement: the bobble head theory.
    Start with suggestions.

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  35. g00dsoup says:

    Life Choices: Out of Service, Love, Money, and Fame, I chose Service and Love.

    Mandatory Conferences: Our second mandatory conferences have been conducted throughout the week. To receive full credit for the assignment, we must update the agenda of the conference with a brief review of the conference.

    Protected Class: “Seattle becomes the first city in the US to ban caste discrimination”
    Caste: From the article shown in class, “The caste system is a social hierarchy that divides people into rigid categories at birth, with those on the lowest rungs of the ladder… on the receiving end of slurs, discrimination and even violence because of their caste identities.”

    Writing Mechanics: Good Citation Mechanics

    -The following are essentials of good citation:-

    – Author is identified
    – The title of the article, essay, or story
    – Which could contain the name of the publication
    – They contain a quotation
    – Sarena Campos said, “That is not interesting.”
    – Sarena Campos said that Professor Hodges is “not interesting.”
    – They could contain a paraphrase, without quotation marks
    – They also have said language
    – Said, believes, claims, asserts, insists (or other varieties of said)

    Examples:
    Daniel Flath, in his essay, “Boylan’s Folly,” claims that “boys can’t learn from women.”
    In Daniel Flath’s essay, “Boylan’s Folly,” claims, “Boys can’t learn from women.”

    Example:
    My dog, Monty, likes hot dogs.
    My dog (Monty) likes hot dogs.
    ( “Monty” does not need to be needed in order to be a complete sentence. The sentence is still complete by simply stating “My dog likes hot dogs.”)

    (Similar to: Author, in “Title,” said that “quote”)

    Colons (:) are equal signs (=)
    Example: In “Boylan’s Folly,” Daniel Flath makes an outrageous claim: “Boys can’t learn from women.”
    ****Outrageous Claim = “Boys can’t learn from women.”****

    The Bobblehead Strategy: The key to this strategy is to get your audience to starting agreeing unwittingly to a series of proposal claims until the habit of agreeing to every claim results in a “yes.”

    ****To avoid the “mob mentality” of your proposal, you first get the audience to agree to smaller propositions that don’t raise large objections****
    ****To continue to reduce the danger of opposition, narrow the field by “getting a ‘buy-in’ on the safe and more general position.”****

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  36. Life choices:
    You have to choose two out of four, but you cannot undo your choice. Choose between Money, Love, Fame, and Service
    You can choose two but one does not lead to another, you renounce the other.

    Caste – a category that you have been born into that you cannot change or escape
    Caste discrimination is now banned in Seattle!
    They realized that they can’t stop it, but they can make it illegal

    Essentials of a good citation:
    -author
    -title
    -quotation
    – paraphrase
    -said language
    – said, believes, claims, asserts, insists, etc…

    You can only quote the exact words that they say, you cannot change any words or names into pronouns or vise verse.

    When you say the same thing twice, you either put it in parentheses or in between two commas. For example:
    My dog, Monty, likes hot dogs.
    You can say: my dog likes hot dogs
    Or: Monty likes hot dogs
    “My dog” and “Monty” are the same thing so it has to be in commas or parentheses

    Get your audience to give little nods… in agreement: the bobble head theory.
    Start with suggestions.

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  37. miliwawa says:

    -The metaphor of the coffee lids once you push down one option, you can’t undo it.
    -Sign a date for the mandatory conferences.
    -Protected Class: Seattle becomes the first city in the US to ban caste discrimination. Caste means you can’t escape the class from where you originated, stuck for life no matter if you moved or have a different financial status (if you were born untouchable, you remain untouchable).
    -Good Citation: Identify the Author, Title (name of publication if applicable), Quotation or paraphrase without quotation marks, and said language( said, beliefs, claims, etc.)
    -When starting your essay, don’t start with claims that will not make the readers want to read more (make proposal claims).

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  38. gobirds115 says:

    Class Notes 2/23:

    -If you could only choose 2 options between love, money, service, and fame, which would you choose? I personally would probably choose love and money but would could also consider love and fame because love is a necessity the money or fame are kind of interchangeable because both can lead to the other.

    -Seattle banned caste discrimination which discrimination into social classes based on somebody’s race and gender. This was done in effort to create equity among different people in their society

    -New Citation techniques: use colons as =, use parentheses for bigger quotes, use said language, and include all necessary information when referencing someones work.

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  39. blueee04 says:

    Today, we discussed how Seattle becomes the first city in the US to ban caste discrimination. I learned that there is a class called the untouchables and it literally means that no one want’s to touch them or even any object they’ve touched. I think that is quite absurd. Just because they were born into a class that happens to be the lowest, they’re treated unfairly. In India there is discrimination against the lower class, the upper class believes that they can do whatever they want to the people lower then them. The people have accepted this because it’s what they were born into, it’s normal to them. It’s sad to see that women are still getting mistreated, openly.

    We looked at several ways that we can identify the author, the title, and contain a citation. Then we replied to the link and tried to correct the three sentences that were provided. I don’t believe that it’s hard to cite evidence but it’s important to know how and when certain citations should be used. There is so many ways in which you could state evidence so it’s not so hard since you have options.

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  40. oatmealvibes says:

    My laptop was dead during the class, I am very sorry and I’ll make sure it is charged next time!

    We did “life choices” with the options of love, fame, money, or service. We were allowed to pick two and renounce the others. My reply is on that post.

    Today and tomorrow is the last chance for the mandatory second conference to receive full credit.

    Protected class: Seattle is the first U.S. city to ban caste discrimination. The professor had shown us a video about how caste is still affecting those in India. The lower class is considered the “untouchables” and the upper class won’t use anything they have touched, and will treat the lower class very poorly just for being born on the side that is considered poor. It’s honestly horrifying and disgusting that’s still happening anywhere around the world and I’m glad at least Seattle is making the necessary steps and protecting the caste.

    We went over what makes a good citation such as identifying the author, title, and using quotations. Paraphrasing works too and make sure to use “said” language.

    Lastly, we went over the “bobblehead method” where you slowly get your reader to agree to a bunch of proposal claims that continue to get closer and closer to your actual hypothesis. Hopefully, by the time you reach your hypothesis, the readers will have bobbed their heads and agreed enough with you to be more open to your hypothesis.

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  41. chickennugget246 says:

    Caste is a class in which you are born and cannot escape.
    You can’t escape caste without moving.
    Seattle becomes the first city in the United States to ban caste discrimination.
    We can’t stop it but we can make it illegal. Do not discriminate. People are born into that lifestyle.
    In India, the “poor” and the “rich” are separated and they feel like they cannot cross into each other’s premises.
    Good Citation Techniques:
    – They identify the author
    – They identify the title of the article, essay, or story
    – They could contain the name of the publication also, but they don’t
    – They contain a quotation
    – They could contain a paraphrase instead, without quotation marks
    – They have said language – SAID, BELIEVES, CLAIMS, ASSERTS, INSISTS, or other varieties of said
    If you can hear the difference, you should see the difference.
    Serena Compos said, “That is not interesting.”
    Serena Compos said that Professor Hodges is “not interesting.”
    Both of the above statements are correct.
    ALWAYS – period and commas inside quotes.
    The bobblehead strategy – little yesses
    Do not get a quick no, get a yes.
    We should get our audience to start nodding in agreement to a series of small premises (claims) until the habit of agreeing to every premise leads to the big yes.
    We should be able to persuade our audience and make them agree with what we are proposing within our writing.
    The lasik example is a rhetorical situation on how to sell and how not to sell.

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  42. inspireangels says:

    Protected Class: We discuss in class that Seattle had passed a law that has ban caste discrimination. Seattle is the first city in the United States to do this. In many areas, caste discrimination still occurs however this act can be the first step to putting a stop to it and taking this matter seriously.

    Good Citation Mechanics: good example contains
    – Author
    – Title of article/essay/story
    – Quotation
    – have said language
    – It may even contain paraphrase

    Bobblehead Strategy: You need to start with a smaller proposition that your audience can agree with. You then need to narrow the scope of the proposal to ease them in on a safe and general position. You will have a better chance of gaining approval for your premise when it’s a more narrow and less obvious proposal. There’s a chance the audience might have “buyer’s remorse” once they have realized they agree to the proposal you made, so before this occurs launch the logical analogies they might have recognized as set up. This is best saved for last to finalize your proposal with a strong conclusion to keep your new converts from revoking their approval.

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  43. jasrielle2 says:

    Feb 23 Comp Notes
    Today in class we began with a scenario of life choices. We had to choose two of the four options given, which were: Love, Fame, Money, and service. I chose fame and love. Fame= money and love is something I feel you need to have a great and fulfilling life.
    We then went over the mandatory conferences we needed to have with our professor, speaking about dates etc. moving onto writing mechanics, in this class the writing mechanic we spoke about was citations. We learned how to get the best citations for our papers. We found ways to find them as well as how to insert them in text correctly.
    The “bobblehead strategy” was then explained. With this strategy the target is to get your audience to begin nodding their head in agreement with your argument. This strategy will begin to persuade your audience into a big yes. The small points being made will lead to the bobblehead agreement following with a successful conclusion. Many examples were given to further expand my knowledge on the topic
    We then went onto claims. We used the Lasik procedure to guide our argument and how to utilize claims. A step by step graphic representation was used to make claims with supporting evidence.
    We went over an article called “Seattle becomes the first city in the US to ban caste discrimination.” This was a follow up to our previous class about peoples opinion on certain topics as well as how society reacts to them.
    A CNN video was watched about how much lower classes need to be protected, with the example of Indian Caste.

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  44. tmjj4345 says:

    –We were presented with a life choice where we were required to choose two out of money, love, service and fame. You can only have two and are required to cut the other two out of your life completely with no loopholes.
    – Caste is a class that you are born into and you can’t escape.
    – If you were born in a lower class you weren’t allowed to cross over to the upper class due to protection
    – Seattle is the first city in the US to ban caste discrimination, which doesn’t stop it, but reduces it by making it illegal. This ban may not end it, as it still goes on everywhere, but it is progress. It’s a step in the right direction where caste discrimination is taken seriously
    – A good citation includes the author, the title of the writing piece, a quotation, said language, and may contain a paraphrase
    – Ask questions that you keeps your audience interested and engaged
    – When exhibiting the Bobblehead Strategy you should start with a smaller proposition that your audience can agree with. You should then narrow to a much less obvious proposal in order to have an increased likelihood of gaining approval and interest from your audience.
    – “Buyer’s remorse” is when the audience realizes they agree with your proposal. As a writer you can logical analogies and tactics they would view as set up. Prioritize finalizing your proposal with a strong conclusion to keep your agreeing audience from disagreeing

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